This is a YARG review. The pitch intrigues. It promises a tale that will be a colourful, nail-biting read. Characterization: Surrounded by familiar friends, Jennifer has a strong sense of self-belief. Isolated, in a new town, she is lonely and her old persona does not fit with this place. The s... view book

This tale has romance. The part of us that loves to get lost in fantasy actually believes that Whatrigal Madugal is prowling the streets of New York, looking for likely victims. We feel elation at his success, at his ability to outrun the police. And the chill of disappointment at the appearance of ... view book

Richard, I like your plot. I think this story has huge potential. At the moment, though, I'm finding that the language is quite elaborate. The voice isn't youthful - the speaker doesn't sound like a boy. I would also watch the cliches. Easy-to-read prose is powerful and holds the reader. The eas... view book

Teenagers will love this. The shy duckling who becomes a swan. And goes on to have a glamourous career. Girls will read this with stars in their eyes. Every girl would want to be Gemma Fitzgerald. Well written. High stars. view book

This story is disturbing and engrossing. Hard to put down. Suggestion: Perhaps it could be more polished if you either followed a strict chronological order, or, have themed chapters. Or - you write it with you in the present, remembering the past - and telling the tale as you would a novel - ... view book