I found the first two paras of the Overview boring, cudnt put a finger on why, but the last two were AWESOME!! – Saying you can provide the location of Heaven, now THAT’s a hook if ever I saw one!! And the forth para where u say ur going to counter arguements against God, now thats cool too coz we k... view book

Rite, fml, i'm being serious when i say this, i actually felt moved by ur pitch!!! never happened before - maybe i can relate to some of what Tommy's gone thru. iv not even started on the story yet. hav ppl said the same about ur pitch? it felt like a story in itself! very impressive. u seem to b ab... view book

in ur pitch u refer to the Green Goblin, which immidiately made me think of SpiderMan. Could you change that to the Grey-Green Goblin or the Pea-Green Goblin, or something? just a thought. if he's going to stammer could you put dashes in there a-all i-is w-well ? that wud make stammering more obviou... view book

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