As promised, here I am, at last. :) Keep in mind that I’m far more familiar with YA than MG, though my first three years of teaching were exclusively 12 and 13-year-olds. Plus, my ears are tuned for American. That should give you an idea how much salt to use with my comments. ;) The pitch is ... view book

I can't leave as extensive a comment as you did for me (forgive me?), but that's partly because through the first three chapters, I have little to say other than well done. More than two chapters with a no-name protagonist--very tricky, stuck with a pronoun all that time, but you made it work. I w... view book

Sorry again for the delay in getting to this. Before diving in, I really wasn’t sure what kind of read I was in for. I think that’s because the title evoked one type of response from me, while the pitches evoked a very different one. The first paragraph of the long pitch had me a little confused... view book

Disclaimer: This is the opinion of a general reader, since I know next-to-nothing about writing this kind of novel. The pitch hints at some potentially interesting facets, but I’m not certain it would win my attention in a bookstore. The MCs are a neuroscientist (unsure why this is capitalized)... view book

Sorry this took so long! A couple of notes on the pitch. Particularly for the purposes of the site, it might help to break the long pitch up into two or three paragraphs, just to make it easier to read on-screen. Also, it’s my own opinion and preference (so get the grains of salt ready), but I... view book