JJ, This was such a delightful, picturesque book with lovable, likable characters and a strong message. Not just a message of right and wrong but one of consequences for ones actions. I think it will be a book read by children but one that adults will enjoy hearing or reading.

I love everything about this book including the ending, and I am hoping it is leading to sequels to this lovable characters. If there is one flaw to be found, it would be to make the names a little simpler. Also in chapter 1 or two ther was an "a" missing in a sentence and in chapter 6 or 7 the sentence where he is speakinf to the turtle you have But i have so more to ask" the word "much" is missing other then that this gets 6 stars from me...Love it much success Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Very interesting concept, though my views are vastly different knowledge is never wasted. You tell your POV with conviction and tha is all a writer can hope to get across with this type of informative book. I wish you much success Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Mildred, I am so sorry this is all you've posted. Your character development is wonderful, especially since you bring in so many at once; I am equally invested in them all. This feels extremely natural and very relatable to many people of all ages. I love the visuals and I think the storyline is terrific, and will do well in a broad market. Please let me know if you upload more.

I love a good "story" and that's just what this is, and the underlying message comes through loud and clear but nice and subtle. You truly are a talented writer. Backed and starred with enthusiasim Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Kat, This is very well laid out for a devotional. I like the way you did the outline giving us pause with each lesson. I am sure this would do well in the Christian market and I like that you took this from the POV of Miriam. I love the Bible and enjoy reading, studying, and imagining myself back then. I sometimes can't phathom, though I understand why, of course walking amongst Jesus and His miracles how someone could not believe. I thank you for sharing yor thought process and study habits with us and I wish you all of God's blessings that He has waiting specifically for you...Backed and starred Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

EM, How sad am I that this is all that is posted. I read this non-stop. Not only is your MC Lovable, passionate and a poster-child for the american dream, but he his captivating and draws you into his life from the second his words are typed across these pages.

You are so talented, your writing is effortless, your character development is flawless. You almost have us believing this guy is our neighbor. There was a time in our county when men like this were the norm and not the obsolete. This is a story full of hope and promise. It is a reminder of what's truly important, yet forgotten, and a testament to the golden rule, love thy neighbor as thy self...

I love your style, humor, and sarcasim, it's just enough.

Your pace is perfect and I think Les could be a beloved fictional character. I can't wait to see where you take Les, and I love the way you expose the modern with the old ways. Being 50 and a writer, I feel just like Les when it comes to techno stuff, give me back my pen and typewriter anyday.

I truly believe this is a WINNER in every sense of the word. You show family values, human passion, and the cracks in our society all under one title...BRAVO Backed with complete enthusiasim Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart Starred and backed with gusto....... view book

Hi Kat, I clearly state it is appendicitis in chapter two starting with the paragraph " One night when my fever hit 105 I was taken to the emergency room where it was determined I had appendicitis" perhaps you haven't read it yet or skipped a paragraph, I do at times on the computer( lose my Place)...Look foward to your thoughts..I would have never left that out as it played a very important role in my life in upcoming chapters. Thanks for taking a look Patricia

I've only read the first three devotionals, but I love your writing style. Very elegant and easy to read. However, there's a vagueness here that is a little bit frustrating. You never say in your second devotional what your illness was - I assume appendicitis? Also, you use the same phrase "my mom says I came out asking why" twice in the first two devotionals. I'd recommend editing that out. I'll put this on my watchlist while I continue to read and consider backing it.

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Hi Raechel, I wantedto finish all of what you posted before I commented. I love your writing style. You have an ease with storytelling within a story, not an easy task, and definetly a gift. You have a wonderful premise and the life lessons are wisely spoken and subtle absorbed.

For me, I would have stuck with the running story of Jessica as she was such an immediate strong and endearing personality and I was drawn to her immediately and as a reader I would have liked her trying to figure out what spooked Ian since in her eyes it was so out of character, and I think had you done that it would have picke up the pace and created a wonderful flow and bridge to when you brought her back into Ian's storyline. This is just my POV from a readers eyes.

I always do my review through the eyes of a reader and not a writer. I got bored with the Jacob story it seemed to much like a typical western and didn't seem to fit it but stood out as a bridge for the plot, it was to redundant and predictable, where as with the rest of your story I was part of the journey, during that sequence I felt like an observer waiting to reach the real story, if that makes any sense. Sure he came off as a greedy person but not and evil, just derranged, as he did lift the boy up.

I only say this because at the end I was so anxious to see how they all meet up and how you join all the friends and families together...I really love it and am so disappointed that there wasn't more to read.

I truly believe this is a real winner but for me Jacob ditracts from the strength of the story and your imagination and in a few spots because you are so talented with descriptives, I felt they would have been better used in describing the story then the scenery as it took me away from the journey and was more of a distraction, more so in the opening chapters, felt a bit choppy after the wonderful opening and the like a paragraph to get through what adam looked like and what the dam looked like, in this spot to build tension I would have hinted that it collapsed when he reached the otherside, help build tension and tie it back to the flash flood later...again just a thought...

That being said, I think it's EXCEPTIONAL and I TRULY loved being swept away...Backed and Starred Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Steve, It is always interesting and gripping to read about history, but it takes real talent to run several storylines and have each of them be equally powerful and interesting which you do very skillfully. Though there are many characters I felt engaged by many and invovled as though I were on the journey and not observing it, extremely important to me as a reader.

This will make a fabulous triology as your storylines have such depth.and your characters have strong development and personalties. There were a few places where I felt less could be more powerful, I recall somewhere in the first three chapters for example, there was a sentence about a dog and you put a unnecessary adjective in front of a powerful word and it drained the strength and seemed redundant, but few and far between.

This is a winner written by a gifted writer...backed, starred, and thrilled to have had the opportunity to read such a special work...Much success which you will receive Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Dayna, A very brave, honest and passionate book. I truly believe that you have a story to tell and with some changes this can touch many. Since I read with my readers hat and not writing hat I will only comment on content.

What I feel when I read this is ery real and shared in a natural state which when written properly is the most moving of all, especially when it's a biography. That being said there is to much repetition with words and emotions which takes away from the raw emotion you share,

I would love to give examples but my typing is limited, however it is an easy fix and this is worth it. I suggest you have a neutral party read it aloud to you so you can hear what I am sharing, and you will also see the extra unnecessary words.

But I for one am a huge fan with high hopes and expectations...backed Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Hi Naomi, I am up to chapter ten and I love it. Not only are the characters wel rounded and full of emotion and depth, but the story hits home because you know that this fiction is based on real times and real lives. I am so drawn into thisbook and feel like I am part of this journey and not an on looker which is so important to me when I am reading a book. I love your descriptives, you paint not only vivid scenery but you allow us through your words to feel an emotion without being told how we should feel and on top of all that the message you incorporate effortlessly of what life with God and without God as your true Father looks like, is real talent, and a must ingredient for a great writer. I will comment again when I finish...I know this will do amazing Backed without hesitation... Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Nicole, I really get it and I think this is a wonderful project you have under way. I love the concept, and since you've read my book you know, I too, used quotes at the top of every chapter, but here is what I suggest in my humble opinion and after praying and asking the Holy Spiri to guide my response this is what I was inspired to share.

What is truly wonderful with what you've done is that you have managed to make the Bible an intimate book for those who may have been intimadated by it, and I can tell you were inspired and put on this path to do so; that being said I can see where in your writing you pulled back.

You fail to share what caused your pain, sure ou eventually "tell us" that your husband had indiscreations, but you don't explore the daily experinces that led you from despair to light.

I have "NO DOUBT" that if you pray over this and ask that your pain, humilation, or your fear to show your vulnarbility are removed and you can look at them as separate entities that this will be an AWESOME guide and comfort, to not only woman but all people who have suffered trust and abandonment issue's in general, and therefore allowing this work to b a light for a much larger audience.

I too had to learn to sit still while writin my work as I had many stories I felt were strong, helpful and pertinent to a chapter, but when they came to mind and I was saying thank you, I received an uneasiness and knew they were not meant for this book but my next.

I believe you are holding back revealing too little, but even though I was told to hold back and you may have been told to open up, the message is the same, we must do what we're told even if we are uncomfortable with what it is we are told to share or not share.

I wish you much success I back this because I know in my heart after you go over this you will hear His message loud and clear..The foundation is solid and now it is time to build the house..God Bless and may He continue to hold you in His loving embrace Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

lLA, What a rivitating, fast paced,imaginative, but believable storyline. I love it. Your characters are strong, relatable, inviting, and well rounded. Their natural dialogue pulls you in and you feel like you're a part of the adventure. You build tension extremely well, and I could see this being a box office smash, with lots of followers, like those of Star Trek.

I could not put this down once the story got rolling.. now for the things that I feel would really polish this up.

Firstly, you need to give some clarity as to the different human's that exist, and a key to explain the powers of each just so the reader doesn't have to go back and reread. For the typo's, have someone read out loud for you so you can hear what is typed because you will read it the way you wrote it..helps me other than that I think this can be a tremendous success...Great imagery, fantastic concept and likabble, believable characters well done Backed Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

James your storyline is very stong and moving, your character development superb, and your imagery is beautiful; that being said this would make a great script or screenplay as you have written every scene detail possible, and for a book instead of adding strength it takes it away. You have to many adjectives surrounding some very strong sentences., your not leaving any imagination for the reader. We all like to invision our own perception of your words. When you describe the house and the cabin there are so much unnecessary information.

When I write my thought down when rereading I read it two or three different ways. How I first write it, shortening the stuff that makes no difference one way or another, or adding where perhaps I left an unfinished image or thought. Reading it aloud or having someone else read it aloud allows you to take the journey as a reader and not a writer. I truly think this would help a great deal and for me once you tighten and weed this garden it is going to be a real beauty...Backed with High expectations Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Sean I am on Chapter 6 there is no doubt you are a very good writer, your imagery is like paintings and your premise to take the opposite result will appeal to many. We always have ways to make a story stronger, how to do this is really a preference as to what is important to the writer. When I read a book I take off my writer cap and put on my reader cap, and I for one am a character person, I want to be on the journey not observe it from the outside.

I would like you to have developed Alisha Grace character more, so that the anticipation of her journal writings and who she was in rank and faith and why she began the journal makes us anxious to read more; which I feel is what her characters purpose from your POV was meant to do. Personalize the battle. The other thing I would sugeest is some kind of Key, either at the top of the chapters or in the beginning of the book as there are a lot of characters to keep track of, and I would give this a timeline to allow our imagination to picture the earth and where in time this attack takes place. I never comment on editing to this point I saw only 2 small mistakes in your chapter one you wrote "how could've this happened" I think flow would be better how could this have happened" your chapter two you said " he said this aloud to no particular" I believe you meant to say " He said this aloud to no one particular".

I think you really have something here for your genre, the fact that the war is only between angels and demons and humans are the pawns is a spin on the "Armededon"type movies. I can see you did alot of research but an average reader might not know the order of angels and their duties or the demons and what their particular powers are, which is why I suggest a key so the reader feels they are in control. Bravo and keep it going..very talented Backed I wish you much success Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart...I will finish what you have posted now and then I will star rate....Thanks again for serving our country God Bless and stay safe view book

Joy, I think this has appeal for you genre I myself felt to many names were thrown atme in the first chapter and had a difficult time, having to reread to stay on course. I think the Historic merit alone is worthy of backing, however, for me, I felt like someone outside looking in as opposed to being on the journey, again this is just a preference and not a reflecion on the merit of your work. Backed patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart
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David, Isn't our God an awesome God. Here we are two perfect strangers, both writing inspired works, both similar in style and message, yet written fom two different NECESSARY angles. You took the modern day scientific comparision approaach; much needed for those who can't seem to make the correlation, which you did with ease, simplicity and amazingly well. I took the emotional approach for all those who stay away due to pain and circumstances preventing them from understanding that God has His reasons for all things but that He lives within us and all we need do is believe and ask for His understanding and guiding light. I have not finished but needed to stop and comment as I was moved to do so...Backed with Vigor Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Miles, You have a gift with Character development. We are immediately drawn into this as if we were amongst the stories and situations. This coukd easily have been non-fiction as fiction usually imitates life, The stories are so vivid that the imagery you create just compliments the already inter-twinning lives and viewpoints.

So often when you speak to siblings their perceptions of a parent are vastly different. The culture aspect is another huge important element that aids in this being a book that will appeal to many...Backed with Pleasure and certainty Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Bradley, I can see the brilliance in the premise and your voice, though this is not my cup of tea I can appreciate talent. Very unique and fresh, an A+ for originality. I am sure you will achieve great success...Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Zonda, What a beautiful inspiring work, spoken in truth and shared with understanding and humility. I love the sumation at the end....We are kindred spirits because we are spirit filled and guided and we have faith and hope and love for all people. I know you have a flock to reach and have no doubt you will. Your book has made my heart smile and confirmed the faith I hold in my fellow human beings....God Bless you and your family and may you bask in Gods Grace and mercy always Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart view book

Zonda, I LOVE chapter seven....You get it and explain it so plainly that the blind will see it...Bravo my Dear Sister..God Bless Patricia view book