267 days ago
James HerbertIain RankinYann MartelMatt Haig
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Would you mind appraise/proofread a chapter of my book....
Wow David, I'm confused. You have been on the site since 2009 yet hav....
David - Hello again!
I am actively seeking Backings. After 14 months....
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Although I don't read romantic fiction (I have to say that in case someone sees this and finds me out) I did enjoy your story and writing. I think that you are well on the way with this book and the only niggles I had were small, but important, ones.
Firstly, you need to learn how to u...
As requested I've read some of your work. On the whole I'd say that you are on the right track and well on the way to producing a good book, but i did spot a few mistakes and have a few suggestions.
There is a comma missing in the first sentence. I only bring this up because it is the fi...
I liked this story and think that it has huge potential.
A few points I'd like to make (these are just my opinion).
I don't think that starting with the witches viewpoint works particularly well. The story is about Tommy and his journey, but the first character we meet is the witch. Your book ...
I enjoyed the idea of this story - I like it when writers try to view the world through the eyes of different animals, such as James Herbert's Fluke - and for the most part I enjoyed the writing but I think it needs a little work. Here are my suggestions (Remember this is only my opinion).
At your request I have complied my thoughts about your opening chapter. I don't know enough about the technicalities of writing to comment on those, so I'll stick to the story.
You say that it is a dark night on a rural, unlit, road and there is a fog, yet you describe much of what ...