First of all, thank you for being to God's call in your life; this is a great project. Suggestion: The first sentence you might want to consider putting an "a" before state. It might help it flow better. Wonderful project! It is so funny, I keep seeing Isaiah 61 everywhere. God is definately trying to bring this awesome chapter back to the attention of His Body. Good luck with this. I hope to get back to this soon.

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Great opening, it really works well in drawing the reader in. You have well developed characters and story lines. Good luck with this.

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Great story, this is definately not a forest I would like to live next to :). Good us of description in illustrating the characters and the story. You have a good project here. Backed with pleasure.

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Great idea, and equally great writing. This should keep climbing. Good luck..

Drew Pate view book

You have an excellent writing sytle and an honesty that will appeal to many readers. Good luck with this...Oh, your cover is awesome.

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I love this opening chapter. It really brings Lucifer and his cohorts out of the fantasy setting and puts them into real time forces to be rekoned with. Good job.

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Good work! I love the irony of the first paragraph, how indicitive of that time. You are natural story teller and this should do good. I look forward to getting back and reading the rest of the chapters.

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You have excellent character and story development. This should do well.

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Thank you for being faithful to the call God has put on your life. This site isn't completely user friendly to this type of MS; however, you might want to jazz up your pitch a little. Fiction style books move fast around here. An exciting pitch will draw more readers in. Many will back just for the return backing, but he the more backings you receive the more exposure that your book will receive. Anyways, I would use the advertising tools that are available here and I think you will get a lot more hits. God Bless..

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You have great character development, and the story flows well. You should have good success with this book.

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I only had a chance to read the first part. It is a good story about a man learning how to be a man, but the text is a little choppy. You might try reading it aloud; however, you have talent and a good idea. Keep working at it and good luck.

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I did not know that about banana trees :). You have a good flow and your story here is well told. Good luck, I see you're pretty close to the editors desk.

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The first chapter is excellent. You have great character development that allows the reader to instantly bond with the characters. I hope to get back to read some more, you have a great project here.

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You have a chosen a great topic; nothing destroys the Body faster than gossip. I pray that this will reach far and wide. Good luck in your journey and God Bless.

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Excellent material, I enjoyed the poem at the end. I hope soon to have some time to go through the entire MS. I will comment as soon as I do. I'll keep this one on my bookshelf.

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Good story, it really draws you in. You have very well developed characters, this story should do well.

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Your story is very well written. You have done a great job of capturing the character of Jack. Good luck with this.

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This is well written with good character development. The main character certainly is twisted. I'm afraid for Jill.

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This is a well written story, and you have done a great job developing your characters. Good opening illustrating how tough it is to be the "new" kid. Good luck with your book.

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Great idea and well written. I hope it does well.

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