One of the first things my daughter did as a waitress was drop a pizza in a customer's lap. She's told me about her mortification in excruciating detail, so your opening paragraph most definitely rang a bell. You have a gripping prose style. This is fast paced and engrossing right from the start.... view book

Very lively text. Absolutely gripping from the start. Dialogue's convincing, descriptions spot on, research nicely 'invisible' as it should be, but undoubtedly there. Going straight on my bookshelf. view book

Clever title. Sets the tone. If the text now turns out to be deadly serious, I'll be disappointed. Good short pitch, though I'd drop 'particularly'. Never use more than one modifier. Each additional one always weakens what you're trying to say. Opening sentence of the long text would make a g... view book

Cover art is tasteful, but perhaps could use a splash of colour in it somewhere to make it more eye-catching. Short and long pitches are excellent. The writing had to be impeccable in these, of course, and it is. Introduction: I couldn't agree more with the basic premise that you MUST make your m... view book

I'm interested in all things 'arty' so thought I'd take a look at your book. The short pitch is good, and invites me to read on. Long pitch stopped me short at "Rueben's". Did you mean "Rubens"? If so, that needs changing asap. Chapter 1. First sentence needs a comma after 'say'. That's all I'm g... view book