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written 816 days ago
cherry

Hi Scott
Well I've managed to read 2 chapters[at last], and - I loved them! I'll have to get back and read the rest, as I had to finish at the end of chapter 2, right at the point where he has to return to the lab. That's the trouble when you're in constant demand, but I'll back for some more - soon. I have a feeling this will develop into a really good story. I'm backing you Scott.
Take care,
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written 820 days ago
cherry

Apart from a little light editing this story needs only one thing - the HC review. I loved the first chapter, and I must get back to read the rest of this as soon as I can. Oh, I also love the originality of your story, America: Unkown is one to watch. Once published this will sell - real big.
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written 834 days ago
cherry

Space Burps is amazing! I picked this story at random, and I'm so glad I did. Written with humor, some of it hiarious, the story flows well, although it does need a little light editing, I'm sure it will do well in reaching the HC review. I urge anyone [sci-fi fan or not] to read this, you will not be disappointed. Well done S J Smith and Theresa Miller.
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written 835 days ago
cherry

Hi Jane,

I've now read more of Clarissa's Kitchen, and I ilke this story, although it's not something i would normally pick up, I found myself inexorably drawn to her plight. and will read the whole book as soon as time allows. Oh, that is not a cop-out by the way. My Mum has Vascular Dimentia and needs constant attention, so my time is very limited. Great story, keep going, you're a good writer with lots to say, and a long way to go.

Good luck,
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written 841 days ago
cherry

I like the way the author has constructed his story, and although it needs a little editing [sentence structuring] it does flow well. Like JET!, it starts a little slowly, but picks up nicely by the end of the first page. This book is close to the HC review, and I am confident it will easily make Ed's desk. This is one of those stories that makes you think; I wished I'd written that!
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written 847 days ago
cherry

Oh yeah, forgot to say, it's on my "Books to read" list view book

written 847 days ago
cherry

Hi Headly, just read your synopsis, I've got to read the book now! view book

written 852 days ago
cherry

A good story, and one I thin will do well here. A few minor glitches, grammar, punctuation etc., apart from that it reads well, and gets you into the story from the off. I'm backing it!
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written 856 days ago
cherry

Hey David, how are you doing buddy? What's this guy Pretzki saying?

"I can't stand first person narrative, an automatic turn off. Yours is the first work that I've read and not felt the I's jumping off the page, a true accomplishment. I'm very impressed" That is what i commented on Wine Dark, Sea Blue by A.L Michael, I'm sorry that can't say the same for this."

All he has to do is - not read the book! Or - wait til the editing is finished! Anyhow, it's only one comment, and he's entitled to his opinion. I still think it's brilliant!

Cheers,
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written 857 days ago
cherry

Hi Diana,

How are things going after the review, is there any news of publication yet? I'm sure I will get an answer from you in the positive. It can't be any other way!

Good luck,
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written 864 days ago
cherry

Up to 27 David.- Harper Collins review. It WILL happen. Editing going well.
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written 867 days ago
cherry

Hi David,
Well I've read some books in my time, but that is SOME STORY! I can't wait to se it come out in print form, it's certainly going on my shelf. I'm backing you all the way with this, and if you need any help with editing let me know, cos I know what it's like triyng to get it going by yourelf.
Good luck David,
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written 868 days ago
cherry

Hi David, I can't stop reading this, but unfortunately I have to feed my face, but I'll be back for more. If you're writing more like this I want to know when! It's pure dynamite! I want to see this at the next Harper Collins review!
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written 869 days ago
cherry

Chapter 12 next, and it getting better and better! I love the scene [chap 11] with the Detroit City mayor at the Pleasure Palace when he sees Shake n Vac with Lizard and Queen Bee. That is so fuuuuunnyy! view book

written 870 days ago
cherry

Hey David, I love the way you build the tension between Willsin, Li'l bobo and Murder when they're in the car, you can't help wondering about when it will all kick off. What i liked most was it took me by surprise, I thought it would happen after they'd left the house, but Hell no, they tried taking him out in the kitchen after dealing with Algondo. Surely this book can't get any better? I'll bet it does!

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written 870 days ago
cherry

Oh, this just gets better and better! This is a story that deserves to be made into a film! But - no production mods, it has to be taken from the book - per se.

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written 870 days ago
cherry

This is real! I love it, and apart from a little grammatical tyding up is a winner! I'm going straight to chapter 6! Yo!
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written 870 days ago
cherry

No holds barred - I like it!

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written 870 days ago
cherry

Chapter 3 is where you tell yourself... I just gotta read the rest of this book! I'm now finding the characters are knitting together very well, and I just have to follow through!

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written 871 days ago
cherry

Hi David, i've read the first 3 pages, and I like the feel of it already. I felt as if I was sat in your car with you, watching the drug store. The characters [love their names!] are strong, and i feel you have a winner on your hands. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the book.
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