You asked me to read and comment. I read the first two chapters and then clicked around at random to confirm my thinking. First, this book is far from original. Everywhere I look I see Harry Potter. Tri-Pot for Quidditch, for example. I'm sure you know this so I shan't say anymore on that subjec... view book

You asked me to read and comment. I read your first three chapters. There is an interesting story here, complete with suitably pointed social commentary. However I found it laborious to read and so, sadly, it's not for me. I can tell you've poured a lot of yourself into this. My only suggesti... view book

You asked me to comment. I have read the first three chapters. This is not good and the person below who told you it was "fantastic" is full of it and must be hoping to persuade you to back her own book, which is presumably garbage. You may have an original story to tell - although I'm unconvince... view book

I read five chapters and enjoyed them. However, I have two concerns. First, the name Aurora. It's so Disney that it can only work as a pastiche and the book doesn't really read like an ironic deconstruction. Although the reference to a song and dance number did make me wonder :) You might as well... view book

I hope it's obvious but this is only one opinion. And where I suggest alternatives I am not saying I am a better writer than you - I'm not a writer at all - I'm simply trying to explain my concerns through examples. I read your first three chapters. As I mentioned in my earlier message, I don't m... view book