Hi Nina
What a moving story you have here. You certainly have not have had your sorrows to seek. Your life has been full of sadness. The positive thing you have to keep in mind is that you had China long enough to see her develop and grow up. We never got to know our grandson Linus, for he was taken from us aged just five days. So we never got a chance to know him. My heart really went out for you in this story. High stars from me.
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Michael
Thank you for your support. I read the first chapter (long though it is) and found myself drifting along with your characters. It took me a while to get into your style of writing, but I'm glad I stuck with it. There is nothing I could fault with it, but then again it is a published book, so I wasn't looking for errors. I wish I could at least put you on my WL, but it is full and overflowing just now. So the best I can do is give you high stars for now. Thanks for sharing it.
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Hi Jim
I've read your first chapter and like the points you've made. We have been married for 38 years this year and believe me marriage is no bed of roses. It is something that has to be worked at. There must be something about marriage in our family, as my two elder sister have both been married for 58 years and my younger brother for 36. So I guess we all know how to respect our partners. If only others had the same values it would be a better world. Though people do not seem to work at their marriages nowadays. They take their vows before God, yet seem to soon forget them, and cast aside their beliefs. It makes me sad. I hope your book can reverse the trend. There was one typo I noticed in HAGAR you wrote 'let' when I think you meant 'led'. High stars from me.
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Hi Harry
This is completely different to anything I've read before, so it is hard to comment on. Not having anything to do with dogs, doesn't make it any easier either. I think to your proper audience this will go down well. There was no typos that I could see, so well done. highly starred for your effort.
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Hi A E
You've set a fine pace to this, getting straight to the point of the plot. A good opening chapter. I noticed though that you wrote in the first chapter the NAME'S NAME where I think you meant the MAN'S NAME. I think anyone with an interest in spy thrillers would love this. Highly starred.
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Hi Lisa
What delightful stories. They all have good morals, which is a good thing to teach children. The stories are short enough to keep the attention of younger children, yet you pack so much into them, very well done. I can only give you six stars unfortunately, but this is definitely going to end up on my shelf to help you to the ED because it deserves to be published. I will look out for this in the shops and buy it for Tilly. I cannot praise you high enough.
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Hi Caroline
How are you and your spirit? I like first person stories. I like them even more if they are true. So here i am reading your life story. It is a fascinating insight into your life. I think you are very brave to have written this. I say this because there is always the sceptic out there who would think of it as some kind of madness or mental illness even. The only problem I had with your story was the tenses you were using. It was mainly written in present tense, but occasionally you revert to past tense. To me the whole story would work better if it were all in past tense, since you are drawing on your memories of the past few years. I know you are telling the story now, but it is still about the past few years, so to me it should be in past tense. Maybe I'm wrong, perhaps you being a former teacher, you will know better than me. High stars, and best wishes for you here on authonomy.
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Hi Justis
I read three chapters of your book, but I found it to be too horrific for me. After what happened with the girl and her baby brother, followed by the horrific slayings, I decided enough was enough for me. Don't get me wrong. It is very well written and I'm sure with the right audience, will go down a treat. There was nothing I could fault you on as a writer. There are no typos that I spotted anyway. I wish you well with it.
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Hi R Joy
I've read the prelude and first chapter. It is so many years since I read Beauty & the Beast I have forgotten how it went. So I read your story with interest. I like your idea and think it will appeal to young and old alike. There was something in the prelude that I couldn't get my head around. When the blanket slipped was it tucked under the baby's chin, or did Senafey use her chin to tuck it in? In chapter one you wrote 'running his running his' hands over the silk. High stars for your story telling though.
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Hi Kate
I have read your first chapter, which I personally thought to be a bit long. I like your story though. It is different to any other vampire story I've read. It takes on a completely new format, which is always a delight. As far as critique goes I agree with James and Michael, but a good edit will fix these minor details. High stars from me. Well done.
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Hi Cheryl
I've read the first chapter,found it to be better than I expected (it being chit lit) with lots of humor through it. I cannot really compare it, as I don't normally read this type of literature. Though what I read I think would be appealing to women and teenage girls. There was nothing in it that I could see to critique. Well done. I have given you high stars as I think it has it's appeal to the right reader.
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I find it difficult to comment on your writing. As I haven't come across anything like it before. It certainly could be a possibility with some of your prophesies, because so many of the predictions have actually happened in the past. Though I suspect it won't be in my lifetime. For Muslim's to run Rome and New York seems rather unreal, though having said that the same could be said of the other prophesies, that have already been proved to be right. So who am I to judge. I could see nothing to critique in your writing, you have edited very well. I wish you luck with getting published.
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Joy
I've reread your story and was deeply moved by it. You are so right in saying that God does everything for a purpose. We would not have Tilly now if it had not been for the skill and dedication of Miss Bosarovic being at the hospital where Tilly was born, because all the other surgeons said that it was a waste of time to operate. We can only thank God that she was there at the right time. So I know what you have gone through and I'm sure you, like me understand that God does everything for a reason. I really felt all the emotions you were going through throughout your life. There is quite a few places throughout where your sentences get broken up, I don't know if this is just an error by authonomy or not, but you should check it out. I gave you five stars last time I read your work, but I am increasing it to six. Once I get my WL and shelf sorted out you will have a place on both.
Best wishes.
God Bless.
Brian.
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Hi John
I started reading your book at 6 am this morning and it brought me life right away, with the humor and wit, which is so undoubted English. It really put a smile on my face as I visualised the scenes you were portraying. A great way to start the day. It is so well written that there is nothing I can critique. Very well done indeed, and I wish you all the success it deserves. Highest stars from me and it will get a place on my shelf in the not too distant future.
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Hi Alexander
I've read some of your Crusade and found it to be very well written. You have a great imagination and you paint a great picture with your descriptions. I agree with some of the others that perhaps the chapters could be split up a bit more, as they are rather long. There was one other thing I noticed in the second paragraph of the prologue you wrote looking turned right and left. I think you need to omit either Looking or Turned as it seems a little confusing or clumsy the way it is. That was all I could see that I would change. Other than that it is a good read. High stars from me.
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Hi Margaret
I have read chapter one of your serious message to believers and none believers alike. I for one have been a believer in God since I went to Sunday school. I also believe that He sacrificed son for our sins, and that we should be eternally grateful. I know too that He does indeed answer our prayers, though He does it at His own pace. We just need to learn to be patient and all our prayers will be answered. I am one of those who only go to church for weddings and funerals, haven't opened my bible for years, but I speak to God all the time, and I know He hears me. I do not kneel, nor clasp my hands to pray. I speak openly to Him, or sometimes I do it by thought alone, but I know He always hears me. I do hope that you manage to portray your love of Him to others so that they too can have the fulfillment of having Him in their lives. If only everyone spoke to Him then there would be no wars or starvation in the world, and the world would be a better place.
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Hi Digby
I like the short sharp chapters here. They are punchy and to the point. There are a few details added here and there for good effect, which work really well. It is fast paced and you get hooked on it very early on, which is always a good thing. You set up the mystery very well, then proceed to give us little clues as to what is happening. Good writing. High stars and it will get a place on my WL once I sort it out. I'm glad I had a chance to read this. Perhaps if you had pursued this you would have made the ED a good while back.
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Hi Alexandra
Since your invite to read swap I thought I would go first. I like the concept of a new and different slant on the bible. Being a believer in God it was nice to see your views of Him and creation. I think you have done a brilliant job of it. It is different and may cause a lot of controversy. Though I am sure you were aware of this when you wrote it. There are one or two typos in it, but nothing that a good edit won't cure. High stars from me because I like it. I hope you will read and comment on mine.
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Hi Bruce
First of all apologies for not commenting sooner, but you know how easy it is to loose track here. I like your story so far, it shows great promise. I really like first person stories, though for me they should be written in either present or past tense. Not a blend of both. I find this distracts me from the story. To me your story would be better told in past tense, reflecting the thoughts of Richard. One would still feel for him and what he was going through. This is just my thoughts, you can ignore them if you want. Thanks for a good gripping read. Highly starred.
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Hi David
When I started to read your book and your MC woke from after the crash it reminded me of the first story in my book about being transported to another world, though the similarity ended there. I thought yours was well written. As I said it was reminiscent of mine so I like the premise. In the first chapter I noticed you changed truck to car in one of your sentences, I think you need to change it to truck, so that the continuity flows Apart from that there was nothing I could fault with it. I liked the way you linked the rainfall to water dripping onto his face from a cloth, very clever link. Highly starred and on my WL.
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