Hey mr E., I think you have a great premise and a very engaging style. My feedback is probably going to seem harsh, but I'm guessing you'd prefer constructive criticism? It's intended to be helpful - I wouldn't waste my time if I didn't think your book was good: The opening sentence: 'reflected ... view book

Hey Effie It's nice to 'meet' a nice Effie. The only other one I knew was a patient in a nursing home I worked and she she was a right old bastard.. anyway, to the book... I love your character's voice. The narrative is engaging and it's very easy to relate to the narrator. I like how you introd... view book

Hello there I like your writing, it flows easily so it's a pleasant read. I think you do a good job of introducing your characters and establishing a relationship between them. I agree with Ken's comment about maybe breaking the first chapter up into a few - it feels like a lot happens (not that th... view book

Great stuff - totally bonkers. I laughed out loud at a couple of the throwaway lines (He was not a tuna man got me for some reason!) Very minor suggestions - in the opening when you say 'His house keeper was..' having her name at the end of the sentence threw me a bit. The structure didn't feel r... view book

Hi Victoria Your writing is beautiful and intense. I don't have any constructive feedback to offer, I just wanted to let you know that I think you have created something special here and to wish you best of luck with it cheers GG x view book