548 days ago
Dark comedy for all!
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Hi Grace, I'm reading through books on the site, I got to you and not....
if you have any interest in children's literature, please ....
thanks grace just hope i can hold on till the end of the month.
Ah, thanks, Grace. But I think I've gone about as far in the pop cha....
Thanks a lot, Grace!
Hey mr E.,
I think you have a great premise and a very engaging style. My feedback is probably going to seem harsh, but I'm guessing you'd prefer constructive criticism? It's intended to be helpful - I wouldn't waste my time if I didn't think your book was good:
The opening sentence: 'reflected ...
It's nice to 'meet' a nice Effie. The only other one I knew was a patient in a nursing home I worked and she she was a right old bastard.. anyway, to the book...
I love your character's voice. The narrative is engaging and it's very easy to relate to the narrator. I like how you introd...
I like your writing, it flows easily so it's a pleasant read. I think you do a good job of introducing your characters and establishing a relationship between them. I agree with Ken's comment about maybe breaking the first chapter up into a few - it feels like a lot happens (not that th...
Great stuff - totally bonkers. I laughed out loud at a couple of the throwaway lines (He was not a tuna man got me for some reason!)
Very minor suggestions - in the opening when you say 'His house keeper was..' having her name at the end of the sentence threw me a bit. The structure didn't feel r...
Your writing is beautiful and intense. I don't have any constructive feedback to offer, I just wanted to let you know that I think you have created something special here and to wish you best of luck with it