If you could write the humor--which is intriguing--without the cuss words you'd expand your potential market. I see too many potential readers, me included, being alienated from page one. This is like Ron White doing the Blue Collar Comedy Show when he has to keep the language clean versus when he d... view book

Intriguing. I'm not sure I'm totally sold yet, but I did find the first parts compelling. I am so-so on the journal format. I felt as though a great deal of story and atmosphere were being withheld from me with this limited viewpoint, but time will tell. view book

Commenting in response to your "spam" request... So, the posted chapter 3 is the first chapter, correct? A bit of a heavy start with too much exposition. Jumping ahead to the first person narrative section showed improved flow. I gather this book is in a position here to have one of the publisher's ... view book