Sorry can't back it from my tablet... shelved with pleasure wishing you success with your work. 1 Love~
Sorry for the delay...I'm on my tablet which won't let me back it, I was able to shelve your work and wish you great success! 1 Love~
Thanks Abby and please know that your comment is appreciated. Will work on it more... 1 Love~
This is a good book, but the grammatical errors make it hard to get through. Even just in the pitch - it should be "man's life." That's the first sentence of the book, with it having an error readers will be adverse to reading more. Although, in later chapters it does get better, like someone else is writing, but the grammatical errors stay the same, so it links back to the writer of earlier chapters.Get some editing done on this. You can do it yourself. "Self Editing for Fiction Writers" is a good place to start.Abby
Thanks Katherine! I really appreciate your time, comments and support! 1 Love~
Hi Lee, What an ebullient narrator, catching me with the ordeals of a war veteran and his aware opinions. I had to read on, owing to his sayings that were either right or felt right. Yet he doesn't feel right back in the U.S., and the happenings at his house are told with the same forthright attitude of his politics. This is unusual, told with fervor, and the pace with the vividness of real life. I liked how the experience of war affected or was even prolonged in the back-home environment. Flows well and captures. Shelved - Katherine
Thanks Jesamine. I've been aware that I need a good editor and can't afford one presently. I don't jhave the skill set to do it either = ( Will let you know once it gets sorted out and thanks for your time... 1 Love~
You have a really great story going on here, but you're going to struggle to an agent, or anyone, to get past the first chapter because it needs a bloody good edit.You describe things well and have the imagination to write a good story. Let me know when you're sorted it out and I'll take another look.Jesamine.
Thanks so much for your time and comment... I really appreciate it! Thanks 1 Love~
WOW I see bestseller. Amazing book really grabs and takes hold of you. I Really like the writing style. I really hope to see this book on the shelves.
Thanks James. I have been told that it holds promise, and is need of some serious editing... I really would appreciate you shelving it and perhaps backing it if you'd do that for me. I'm getting ready to do some serious cooking today so I'll check back later. Thanks 1 Love~ and
Came back to read chapter 1 and so glad I did. There are some typos and formatting issues but content wise it was very good, from the political rant at the beginning to the drug fuelled escapades of Jacques this shows quite a spectrum of topics.This kind of lifetime story, from growing up in New Orleans, the period as a businessman and drug dealer on the side, and then into military service and finally sitting at the window in a VA hospital, not only makes a great book but would make a great movie in the American Gangster vein.Very interesting opening that just needs a bit of tidying up.James
Sorry for the delay! I love the premise, Give you a high rating and added you to my watchlist... Please send me a reminder to "back your book" after the 1st of September... Glad that I can help, and I wish you great success in your efforts. 1 Love~
Thanks for your review "Wanttobeawriter" and yes I will take your suggestion. I've been out of the loop taking care of my Mom's transition in to assisted living. It's going on six weeks here... I'm waiting on a new key board that should arrive today (YAY). And I am considering a professional editor prior to getting to the the ED. Again, thank you for taking the time to review and comment on my work. I really appreciate you! 1 Love~
OUT OF ORLEANSThis is a story with a dramatic beginning: first the narrator relating how he’s been in a veteran’s hospital for 28 years; then the story of Jacques. I like the “inside” feel to the way you explain how to cook cocaine; makes a reader feel as if they’re being let in on something maybe they shouldn’t know. Going back in the next chapter and describing Jacques’ childhood is a good way to justify how he arrived at the point he’s at in life. A small thing: I had trouble in the beginning deciding if Jacques was the same person as the narrator. Is there a way to make that clearer? Either way, this is a good read. I’m starring it highly and adding it to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?
Congratulations and I hope that you continue your success to the E.D. If you would please check out my work, "Out Of Orleans" as it seems to be stuck in the 100-120's and I really could use your support. Thanks in advance. Lee J. 1 Love~
Back and starred per your request! I hope that you will get the opportunity to do the same for me... "Out Of Orleans" seem's to be stuck in the 100-120's ! Please back it for me when you get some space. Thanks in advance for your time & consideration. Lee J. 1 Love~
Kim, thanks for that insightful comment. I seriously need a professional editor and my work needs all the help that it can get. Again, Thanks Lee J.
You have an unusual and distinct way of writing. There were a lot of punctuation errors and some text where there were no speech marks and yet it was speech but these things are easily remedied. I enjoyed the very beginning of the book when the veteran is looking out of the window and suggests that the institution he is in is a secret. I would suggest that you elaborate on this before you go into the main story to build up to what is to come. Best of luck with Out of Orleans.Kim (Pain)
Thank you ever so much for your comment! I really appreciate your support and hope that you can assist me in making it to the E.D. Thanks! 1 Love~
Thanks so much Adeel, I really appreciate your time and comment. Sincerely, Lee J. 1 Love~
A nice, descriptive and well written book. Your writing style is very impressive, dialogue are realistic with vivid charachters and narrative is at great pace. Highly rated.
Wow! Thanks for the support and awesome words! I really appreciate you! 1 Love~
Words jumped right off the page......grabbed ahold of me...... and didn't let go until the last word was read..... In your face...........honest.... gut wrenching.....message of experience, strength and hope....LOVED IT!! I want MORE... :-)
Thanks Lynn, I really appreciate the support! And if you think of it return bi-weekly, that would be so awesome! 1 Love~~~~~~~
You have an awesome way of sharing your thought ~ Keep up the great work my friend.
Thanks Andrew! I've got a new project that I'm working on and have to give this more attention! 1 Love~
KEEP DRIVING THIS BABY.....NOT FAR AWAY?
Thanks for reaching out to me. I've backed, watchlisted and starred your work based on the primise alone. I will give you a read soon when I can make the time to do it. I'm not big on commenting as I feel that I'm not qualified. If you get a moment please check out my work "Out Of Orleans" and give me your support if you like it. Thanks in advance and Happy New Year! Lee 1 Love~
Thanks Rhonn! Hope that all is well in the DTX! 1 Love~
Congrat's Lee... Wishing you much success ALWAYS! Rhonn R. Dallas/Ft. Worth TX
Thanks Towanna and I have the same wish... 1 Love~
Although I have not read the entire book yet, I will as it really has grabbed me. Based on the first chapter, this book should be put in the stores so folks can feel the real honesty in the pages. I will continue to send my opinion, as I continue to read this. Towanna (Seattle52)