Futhark has a strong opening, with Pinch a resourceful character with a lot at stake (survival). There's a Mercedes Lackey novel with a similar opening, so you're in good company in the fantasy field. I didn't mind the present tense narration, but I found the extremely short paragraphs (most of them... view book

Finally getting around to an actual review. Fossil Farm is excellent. Seth's voice comes across clearly, and strikes a good balance between the teenage confusion and letting the reader in on what's going on (even when he himself doesn't get it). While the subject matter could easily become preachy, ... view book

Having a look at Terrors because of your email. While I have nothing against devotional literature, I don't think Terrors is doing the best job of inviting the reader in. You seem to be presenting this pretty much as you write it, in blocks of thought that don't flow from one to the other, so each t... view book

Sex Stone is fast-moving, funny, and over-the-top. My only reservation would be that it's so much in the British tradition that it might not travel well, but perhaps this has changed with the successes of Douglas Adams, Terry Pratchett and Tom Holt. Good luck! view book

Revising my previous comment in the wake of your revisions of Bluebird's narrative - well done! I had a much better feel for her both as a First Nations woman and as a sympathetic character undergoing severe temptation. Only one point, and it's quite minor - the possibility that the name Running Bea... view book