This is a very thoughtful interpretation of a Led Zeppelin song. I've always thought story-telling and music go hand in hand and you've clearly illustrated that in this work. Reading your first chapter, the story is well organized and has very profound statements, however it is, at times, a little hard to understand. Putting your document into MS Word may help improve the grammatical errors and spelling. Other than that, I really did like your first chapter. A picture may be worth a thousand words, but song lyrics require a million to be fully explained - and you certainly know that. So much can be understood from Led Zeppelin, and we must never forget their contributions to society.Good read.
Benedict,I've taken a look at the first chapter of the Princess and the Peach! It's a really interesting story. I love the fastpaced dialogue, including the great line: "Dad's throwing a tantrum again and Mother's on the warpath". The premise for this chapter, finding a suitable bride, appears to be cleverly maticulated; and so is the idea of seeing a petite princess (the likes of Paris Hiltion, but much more refined) quivering from her fear of heights as she screamed for someone to remove the squishy pea from under the mountainous matress pile. Visualizing that really had me going, haha. I should add that most of this first chapter had me writhing in laughter. Yes, it was painful. After reading some of the comments from your audience, I find myself highly encouraged to continue reading. But alas, I'm out of time. Do you fancy giving my story a look?Chris