Hi Stuart, Oh, what a fun read. You have a great premise here, and the beginnings of an excellent courtroom drama/suspense story. You do a great job of milking the suspense, making your book a real page-turner. Great work!! I just have a couple of notes from the first couple of chapters. Nothing b... view book

Hi Barbara, What a nice beginning! You do a great job of putting the reader in the scene, introducing us to the characters and making us care, then you give us a cliff hanger. Chap 2 is strong in scene-craft, great dialogue that reveals characters and plot, very strong action that does the same. (... view book

Hi Steve! Wow, this starts off with a bang. I love meeting a heroine in the middle of a death defying situation. Watch the cliches - See you in hell, her mind raced in a thousand directions, a cold chill ran up her spine. The strength of this opening section is the description of the action, but... view book

Hi there, I just took a look at your first couple of chapters. My main feedback is that it's all action, I don't know anything about the characters and as a reader I don't know why I should care. There's not a lot of description of the setting, and nothing that evokes mood. You're great with tensio... view book

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