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written 1493 days ago
cherry

The humour and take on life in this is very, very good.
I could happily just lay back and cover to cover this, stress free writing – good luck

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written 1758 days ago
cherry

Good point about the blow job, i like to think of her so naive and sheltered but your right maybe i just need to put that she is sickened at the thought of doing that.

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written 1761 days ago
cherry

What a fantastic read, it reminds me of River Cottage.

You have some lovely recipes on there some of which i will be trying out, the lentil bake sounds gorgeous.

This is a book to curl up on the sofa with on a wet afternoon.

You have certainley got my creativity in cooking stoked.

I'll back this book all the way and I dont think it will be long before you get snapped up by a canny publisher. view book

written 1761 days ago
cherry

Thank you for your comments, in regards to the chapters i messed up loading the chapters the first chapter is actually the first three chapters d'oh!

Good point in regards to the main characters though, i will take a good look at this.

I'm of to read yours as it sounds like my kind of thing, i can imagine with the current climate your book would do really well. view book

written 1761 days ago
cherry

Hi, I think you have created a believable world with believable characters, but I agree that it needs quite a bit of editing. For this site, I think your chapters need to be shorter (something we have had to do also, with THY). Then you are perhaps trying to race through everything at a 100mph, maybe we need to get to know the main characters a bit better. I am no expert, but I would say that your main problem is, structure. There is lots of fun stuff in there, though, and lots of scope for your story's development. Will back it.

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written 1763 days ago
cherry

Yes its the first draft, advice would be appreciated as to what you think needs to be done?

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