Hi Toscka. Just had a look at chapter 21. You have built up the drama again after Shah's lecture, which is good. No real criticisms, just a couple of observations. When Shah was talking about Max's treatment at the airport and the foreigners who never come out of prison, it was obviously a threat... view book

Hi Amerinthe It was lovely to meet you at Winchester and I’m sorry it has taken me so long to get to you. I think this is a really good story. Vampires are all the thing at the moment. Aimee says at the beginning that she is wasting time telling us all the details and I think she is right. We... view book

Hi Jo. Sorry it has taken me so long to get to you. This is a really good crime novel. You have all the right ingredients. A gruesome serial killer. Caring police officers with just the right amount of their own problems and a narrative which moves along quickly. I think you will do well and I am h... view book

Hi Lynne. Finally got to you. Sorry it took me so long. I think this has a lot of potential. You clearly have a good story here. I do think that the beginning is a bit heavy on backstory, however. Do we need to know all the details of John and Carolyn's life so soon. These things work better if ... view book

Just read through the whole piece again because it’s a while since I’d read it. I still think it's one of the best things I've read here. Last three chapters are good, although now you’ve taken 20 away again. Just one criticism – sorry but you knew there’d be something didn’t you? I did get a... view book