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written 696 days ago
cherry

I have to say i love this. This is the first book i have read which gives you both peoples views in first person. This was good for me to read because i wrote a book like this (well not finished it but hope to one day) and this shows it can work.
From the start you had me thinking about what was going on in the dream world, and what it really was.
The story reads well and doesn't feel rushed at any point .

Good read
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written 696 days ago
cherry

This is a amazing read. It has a strong pitch which caught my interest to give it a read. The start i love, great opening to this book. Can't really say anything bad about this tbh, nothing wrong with it.
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written 698 days ago
cherry

I like how you tell this story, reminds me of those old detective movies where they have a voice over telling the story. The first chapter has a great ending and i will be happy to read more when i can. Keeping this on my wl for now.
Highly rated
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written 701 days ago
cherry

I like this. He sounds like he has a lonely life though, which he doesn't think much of. There is some commas missing in places, and numbers need writing in word. Nothing you can't fix, i know i had that problem with mine too. The story is fantastic and captures the working class life well. Still going to rate this high because the problems i am sure you can sort out in time. Thanks for asking to do the read swap, this is one of the rare times i found a book i really enjoy. view book

written 701 days ago
cherry

HCG review( sorry it's late)
From the pitch i had no idea what this would be about, but you cleared that up straight from the start. I love how you write, you certainly picked the right genre for you talents. Something that took me back a bit was the name Joseph Williams, because it was the name of my dead grandad.I Also use the name Williams in mine so it was a bit of a wow moment. I really like this, the only problem i found was reading the text, but that's because I'm dyslexic and i have that problem with certain fonts. That did't change my view on this been a great story.

Hope this does you well, should do All the best Highly rated
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written 701 days ago
cherry

I love books wrote in first person, i feel it allows the reader to connect more with the story, the story it's self i like. It very unique to other stories which i have read. Which in a way i think makes it better. I think i will keep this on my watch list for now. Highly rated.
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written 702 days ago
cherry

This is a good book. You give the reader a good idea of what is going on in her mind. I like how the first meeting with a scottish person goes, you wrote it in such a way even people not knowing of the accent get a idea of what it would sound like. Fantastic so far, i see why it is so highly ranked now

The pitch is strong and makes you think about what could happen and so draws you in. view book

written 702 days ago
cherry

This is got to be the oddest thing i have ever read. But with that said it is also the most unique and by far the most creative. Glad i came and read this, sorry it was put off for so long being a bit ill and busy.Highly rated and hope this does well, should do. view book

written 704 days ago
cherry

From the pitch i was unsure about this, i am not a huge fan of books about magic. But i found myself reading more than i thought i would. The style you write in is good for this story. I would love to know more about how people look, but with this being a kids book that probs isn't to important.
highly rated, will leave on watch list in hope i find time to read more. view book

written 711 days ago
cherry

Hey i just read the first two chapters, its really good. Got me hooked, i like the common views on france which you include, makes it feel more real. I have read a few books on here, this is by far the best, the story is better and so is your writing style. Only thing i would like to have known was more detail about what the characters look like, but i am glad i came back to read this. Thinking of backing it. view book

written 711 days ago
cherry

Hey this is really good. It did confuse me in places but when i got into it i really enjoyed it. i couldn't see anything really wrong in it. It's well written piece. The use of drugs shocked me a little, but it fits in with the story. view book

written 717 days ago
cherry

I am not a big fan of books with religion as a major part. But as a story forgetting about that , this is well written, the plot seems good and it is a interesting read.
I see why this is so high though after reading it. It is faultless and reads like a book you would find in any good book store. Hope you do well with this and get in the top five. Highly rated. view book

written 717 days ago
cherry

HCG
I Love a good wolf story and this one didn't let me down. It's perfectly written and flows well. The good use of language helps the story flow well. the only part that stooped me reading for a second was the spelling of colour. But that is because I'm english and i take it your not. The way you detail things is brill. It is something i find most stories lack, but you give the reader plenty to go on.
Over all a really good read which i will leave on my wl to read more, when i have time
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written 718 days ago
cherry

A sad story so far from what i read. From the start it had me wondering what was wrong with her. You done a good job writing this. The way you write is just perfect to tell this story. As for mistakes, i don't think i spotted any. it flows well and you go into just enough depth when needed.
Highly rated
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written 718 days ago
cherry

Hey vampire books are something i am always reluctant to pick up. I love the true blood ones but that's about it. (Bought Bram Stokers Dracula to read last week so see how that is.) Anyway the reason i don't really like them is because they all seem the same old same old. But not yours,from your pitch it had me wondering and wanting to read more. I have to admit i do really like this, i can see why it is ranked so high. 5 stars and backing. Hope to find time to read more. Good luck. view book

written 719 days ago
cherry

I read the first story but couldn't read more.I wanted to but it came up with a error, but i will come back and read more as i enjoyed the bit i could read. the story was fantastic, i find short stories are hard to pull off but you did it well. The only problem was the first para i think you missed some commas, but maybe that was just me. I will leave this on my wl and come back to read more another time. I hope next time it doesn't error. Highly rated book. would recommend to anyone who just wants a quick read. view book

written 720 days ago
cherry

i skipped chapter one because i can see someone has already pointed out things for you there.
Chapter 2
para1- you put to act out me revenge. i think you mean my
another part you put founds instead of found . it is a the bit when you go on about the hotel and stealing food.
The second para i found used their a lot in the one section. But tbh i don't see what else you could put instead.
There also is some commas missing in places, and some long sentences. Which you could probs break down.
As for the story it's self, can't really pick at it. The story does flow well and is certainly unique. i haven't come across anything like it
i hope the Points a found help you out.
highly rated
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written 721 days ago
cherry

I gave the first part of this a read, it isn't my type of read and i struggled to get into it. I don't think it's a bad story,just it's not for me. As for errors i couldn't see any. There was a big paragraph which you could maybe make into 2 or 3 smaller ones but that's not a issue. The characters are strong, and Alex seems very interesting. you do a good job of giving us a back story and bring the reader to the reality of fostering.
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written 722 days ago
cherry

I'm not a huge fantasy fan but from just reading the pitch it had me thinking twice. I spotted no problems at all. The story is told well and the descriptions are full.
The only thing which i would say may help is to have a page at the start or the end which breaks down the names so the reader knows how to say them. They made me stop a few times to read over them again. But it doesn't take anything away from this being a good read. I see why it has so many backings now. view book

written 722 days ago
cherry

I'm not a huge fantasy fan but from just reading the pitch it had me thinking twice. I spotted no problems at all. The story is told well and the descriptions are full.
The only thing which i would say may help is to have a page at the start or the end which breaks down the names so the reader knows how to say them. They made me stop a few times to read over them again. But it doesn't take anything away from this being a good read. I see why it has so many backings now. view book

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