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written 218 days ago
cherry

Highly starred and backed - can't stop reading this exciting story!
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written 218 days ago
cherry

Hi Gene! I'm here with my return read.

Cravenstone
The Synopsis had me very interested especially with the Native American Indian girl and the 'Sasquatch' friends. I was curious to see what the story was about.
After reading a couple of chapters I could see that you have a very polished and well edited story. The conversations between Rick and his mom are very natural and believable - well done. Some of them tend to lengthen when they could be combined together - its just my opinion, Try it, its something I've done myself and found it sounds better.
I really enjoyed the first couple of chapters - the dialogue is great and the storyline interesting, but I wonder if for a sci fi book it might be moving too slow. When I put my book on Authonomy I was told by other writers there was a lot of competition in sci fi and fantasy, so I was advised to make something major or otherworldly happen in the first chapter of my book, otherwise it wouldn't stand a chance. I don't always go by what other writers say, but its worth a thought.
An enjoyable book. Backed.
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written 218 days ago
cherry

Enjoyable book. I couldn't stop reading. You have strong interesting characters and an emotional story that a lot of people can relate to. This should do really well. Good luck.
Please take a look at my book 'Four Corners'.
junetee
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written 357 days ago
cherry

This is a very unusual and imaginative book. I read it a long time ago and I had to read it again. I love the idea of the library being the place that we choose the life we have next. You have written this beautifully and have captured the emotions and created almost a heavenly scene amongst the library, with the books and the woman. Good luck.
junetee
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written 377 days ago
cherry

'Punch Through' IS an exciting story. I read the first few chapters and I really believe you have an interesting book and as a script would make a great film. The butterfly effect is an exciting theory and the three battles would make some brilliant action scenes. You write well and I hope that your book gets seen by someone soon.
junetee
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written 448 days ago
cherry

You are a wonderful writer and you manage to create such an atmospheric beginning to the story with Melody's thoughts of her on the past.
I'll read more when I've edited my book and get back to you.
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written 448 days ago
cherry

An intriguing prologue. I'll read the next few chapters very soon and get back to you. This sounds a great book!
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written 464 days ago
cherry

Doghouse Blues.

Just a quick comment to say I really enjoyed this wonderful comedy. I imagined it as a sketch on TV when I was reading it. You have written it so well that I could picture all your characters perfectly.
I love the smooth way you introduce your characters. Charlotte - a 'striking siren.' And Roger now missing his 'dark, floppy hair.' A comfortable way to bring in your amazing humour right from the very beginning.
I know from my own experiences as a mother and grandparent how children can put you in some very awkward situations, and the hilarious moments they can also be. The part - 'Is mister Jones from next door a twat, then?' had me laughing and I had to read more, then I was hooked.
This is a great book and I can see why its doing well. Its well edited and put together and I wish you luck at the editors desk.
Highly starred and recommended.
junetee
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written 571 days ago
cherry

iT'S A DOGS LIFE.

This is a great story. You have a good imagination and some amazing stories to tell about your wonderfuls pets.
I'm a dog owner myself and have had dozens of dogs throughout my life. I think any pet owner will love this book.
My dog is a black lab, and he has to have a bath every week due to a skin complaint and alergy but everytime he has his bath we have to keep him in because he rushes outside and runs in the fields and rolls on something dead. It smells klike something dead, but we can never find whatever it is! Theyre so funny. He costs us a fortune with his illness - even with insurance, but we love him to bits.
As soon as you mentioned snow, I remembered my little Yorkies. One called Danny used to have to go to the end of our large garden if he wanted to do more than a wee, and if it was snowing he'd come back with these fur balls underneath him that were nearly as big as his head. Goodness knows how he walked.
The humour in your story makes the reader want to read more and more. The 'toilet dance' really made me laugh out loud. And the puppies 'going green- if that's possible.'
You have hit on a subject that many people love. Dogs are mans best friend and just like babies they love to talk about them ( like me) and compre stories).
Great read. high stars.
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written 571 days ago
cherry

Crazy Quilt.

This is an intersting story and kept me interested all the way through the first three chapters.
I liked the storyline. It made it more interesting the fact that the two young woomen who inherited the house, didn't actually know each other, and they were both very different.
Its written well and polished nicelly. Youve managed to create some nice tension between the women when they want the Grandmothers bed.
Nice work and a good read.
junetee
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written 571 days ago
cherry

Jill and Jack.

This is an amazing story.
I was intrigued when I read the pitch and that was why I wanted to swap reads. The first chapter - or was it prologue, kept my interest from beginning to end. It was everything I expected it to be. You write this very unique and mysterious story excellently. I needs no 0ver- fussy descriptions, and holds its own with its detail to aid the supernatural things that are happening to both Jack and to Jill. Its written so naturally that it seems as though it is a true story.
high stars
junetee
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written 571 days ago
cherry

In A Blink.

Excellent story and well written with some great imagery.
A nice simple and short prologue and a good beginning to chapter one.
I love the ending of the first chapter, its very visual and makes the mind wander. you certainly have a gift with words!
Hope you can find some time soon to read and comment on my book 'Four Corners.'
Junetee
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written 575 days ago
cherry

Knightly Braves the knights of Chevalis. book 1.

I love the way you jump straight into the story. Its what a good fantasy book needs. There's some really good realistic dialogue. Your characters names are good too and they complete the whole picture you are trying to create.
There is some good imagery too. It wants a bit of polishing up but I really enjoyed what I read. I'll watchlist it until I have space on my bookshelf.
Lots of stars!
junetee
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written 575 days ago
cherry

Origional Sin.

I'm really enjoying this book, the characters, the sense of humour and the alternate world.
Your writing is excellent and every chapter left me wanting to read much more.
It deserves high stars and backing.

junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

Through the fire the tsaren fay chronicles.

This is an unusual story. I like the way you haven't used too many descriptions. Its very simple, not flowery and straight to the point.
It is visual, the sentances flowed well and the dialogue is good.
I find the idea of your m/c finding himself in a different world intriguing. First he believes he's dead because the man calls him 'Earth child.' Then he discovers the man is a gnome. He isn't sure where he is then, whether he's alive or dead.
You set the confusion well and I really enjoyed reading this. Great end to the chapter. I'll be reading more later.
Highly starred.
junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

A shifter's tale.

This is a well-written YA fantasy novel.
You have a great plot and m/c.
You have some wonderful descriptions though sometimes they can be a little bit too long. And you create a mysterious atmosphere very well.
Nice chapter ending and an enjoyable read. High stars.
junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

An Untenable fragrance of violets; book 1. Innocence lost.

I am overwhelmed by your wonderful descriptive writing. And I am so moved by your story.
Being a mother is an amazing thing AND You have captured all the natural positive feelings a woman has when her children are around her. I guess not everyone feels the same way all the time, but they understand the love and the bond a mother has with her children.
You have also covered 'time'. As the years go on our children grow up and move on and have their own families. Mothers often feel lost and alone. At the end of chapter two when 'There is a tiny silent moment. Only a moment and small voices intrude on the silence. etc' I felt so relieved for her.
Very emotional journey through life.
This is a wonderful story and it is a pleasure to read. Great work.
Highly starred.
junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

Hi Deborah, I think I owe you this read.
I love the first chapter. Its pretty flowery and light, and a wonderful way to begin your book.
Chapter two you continue to write in a poetic and descriptive style. I felt drawn into the story always wondering who the guy with the guitar is and what will follow.
It moves at a comfortable pace and I enjoy your style of writing, With it you created some very visual pictures in my mind. I love the way you describe the guy with the guitar.
Thankyou for the amazing read.When I have more time I'll be reading more.
Highly starred.
junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

Gabriel's Destiny.

I love the pitch. The story sounds amazing.
In the first chapter youve managed to show the mysterious side to Gabriels character. The way he rescues the helpless boy and he shows a side of himself that shocks and mystifies those who witness the scene. Gabriel is a character I definitely want to read much more about.
It needs some polishing but this is a gripping story and youre a great writer. I'd love to read this again in a few months after you have done some editing.
Here is a sample of what I mean - Hope you dont mind pointing it out;
'Gabriel, who had just joined them at that point laughed at the idea and although they joined in. The guys were actually half considering it and the closer they got to the school the better it sounded.' The full stop is in the wrong place for starters. Maybe if you put it after 'idea. Then started the next sentance with 'Although.'
Anyhow its a great story with an origional idea.
Thankyou for the read.
junetee
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written 577 days ago
cherry

Stop the Insanity.
Sorry I've taken so long following-uo this read swap, but at lasy here I am.
I opted for chapter ten, which you origionally asked me to read.
Education is something I have my own opinions about - though many would argue against them and I can understand why they disagree with me.
First I get the whole feeling of dispair. Okay, its understandable that people want their children to have a good education and often their children need to go to university to study for a particular occupation like law etc. However there are many of them who go to university and dont really have an occupation in mind and dont really need the qualifications. I honestly believe the further education isn't necessary for half of the students attending.
When you talk about feeling sorry for the people who have to get loans to send there kids to university, it makes me think 'are they in the real world?' I never dreamt of being able to go there. My nephew has just got a loan to go this year and he feels very priviledged. But he knows that even though he will have qualifications afterwards they wont necessarily get him a job. In fact he'll probably end up working in a factory or at Mcdonalds. But I guess its okay to have dreams.
It is expensive to go to University. In England if you haven't a great deal of money but you can get help with student loans. You have to pay them back when you get a job but unlike many others, I believe its a good thing. Students never used to have to pay the money back which I dont agree with. At least now they take more responsibility and dont waste the money on partying etc.
But even so I do think the government in both America and England should fund more. You mentioned Cuba when you asked me to read your book. In Cuba, University is fully funded for - I dont particularly like their system, but their youth do get a good education. So why is America with their so called 'world leadership' so far behind?
Stop the Insanity is a well written and extremely interesting book. Highly starred.
junetee
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