YARG Review Julia, I've read the first three chapters and so far it seems pretty interesting. The skin allergy is unique and Jack and Beth have very interesting personlities. The writting is well polished and I only found a few typoes. THe only critique that I had was that the desription was v... view book

Hey Mike! I read your new prologue and I reread your edits for chapter one. I like both a lot more than I did before! I think it moves at a quicker pace and I can picture everything really well. The prologue, in my opinion, could still take a little bit more smoothing out, the dialogue between Ai... view book

Hey Mike, So I read the first chapter and I find the story much more interesting. The pace was a little bit faster, but I think I realized what kind of throws me a bit out of the story. Its that there is a lot more telling than showing. The reader gets a list of what people are like as a characte... view book

Dyane, Gosh I love this so far. I think the beginning is well paced, not too slow, and draws the reader in with the imaginative characters and the saddness that the world is dying. I'm endeared to the Eagles and I have hope for the Nardinites. I want Charlotte to rally and bring hope. I've only r... view book

Mike, I like this prologue a lot better. It was much more epic. I thought the guardians thing was creepy and gross and that the pace was much better. I'd still like something else. I don't know. Something that will immediately tie this story into the next part where the story really begins, like ... view book