"CLF 2" review

Wow. Jack is getting to be an abusive husband-verbally. He is such a jerk for being derogrative towards the middle class. Maybe she just should have made the lobster bisque as women are supposed to submit to their husband. Also, if I asked someone to cook one thing and they cooked something else without letting me know I would probably be upset. Still, he should not have complained about her ratty jeans. Jeans are cool or can be. I hate blasers adn I wouldn't want to wear slacks.

I liked GLen's thougths about hoping the lottery won't change them. view book

YARG review

You do very well with the descriptions and hint of suspense. I could learn from you. I would love to read more. Keep up the good work. view book

Chapter three is very descriptive as well. I think we should refer to first chapters as cursed, because I find those very hard to write ! I like the emotion she feels, that ranges from hate towards Eddie, anger at God, realization she hurt Eddie, to realizing she also hurt God. I also liked Eddie explaining Jesus' love. You do pretty well writing a female's perspective. view book

I like the second chapter much better. It is very descriptive and almost poetic or song-like. This is the kind of story I like. I wonder what will happen next and if there will be redemption for the character. You can see why Row acts the way he does, because he wanted to be a Marine and got rejection. It does not justify it, but gives a reason. view book

Looking at another person's comments...if it is her grandma, why does it say great-grandma? Why does she call her great-grandmother "Gram"? Some readers will look at this and have the same questions. Don't worry, I struggle with this myself. view book

Christian Lit Review:
Skimming through this, I wondered where her grandma was.
Form should be from

You accidentally put a capital and lowercase "g" together.

Positive:
The love story aspect could be good, if I was not focusing on earlier edits :P
I can relate to being a college student and feeling educated
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YARG REVIEW
While she dose seem like a nightmare of a child, I do not think her parents should have left her. Your child is your responsibility and you should never abandon him or her. On the other hand, you did great in chapter one by making your writing almost sound similar to a classical writer. Keep up the good work! view book

YARG REVIEW

WOW! Love the descriptions. You do well with drawing in readers. I like the part where he wants to eread about early American patriots, which he does tho it's not allowed anymore. I wonder why they have to be there? To be fishermen for the government hope we don't go into a dictatorship too soon, but that's a different topic. It's amazing how they have to miss out on birthday cards, etc. Do you think what they teach in History classrooms be it k-12 or colleges is false? I'd love to hear your take on things. view book

Looked at chapter one. I like that you don't have the first chapter filled with curse words. True, a character curses but you only say she cursed. It is so annoying that people feel a need to put cursewords in every five minutes or sentences. Really, could they come up with somethign better? I relate to the thing about overpriced coffee. That would definately attract readers because it's trendy to buy fancy coffe and other things from coffee shops even if the price is ridiculous. I love that he cares about his grandma but mischevious in his thoughts towards her. It's like he has this responsible, caring side and this side that doesn't always act the way she taught him or something. view book

It is good that you talk about Christ as He is alive, unlike other religious leaders. He is more than that. He is the Son of God and the Living God. I am gla you are writing a book on pleasing God. Sometimes ppl take the verse that says it's impossible to please Him and use that as an excuse to live how they want.

Crowded (on kindle)
Perfect Forgivenes (on kindle)
To Be Sane (on here, authonomy) view book

YARG

LOL. Cassidy is very relatable. Kids should be paid for being a student and cafeteria food is not always the best. Neither are potluck foods. I like her quirkiness. I hope things get beter for her!

Shaina Cilimberg

Crowded (search for it on Amazon.com)

Perfect Forgiveness (Also on Amazon.com)

To Be Sane (On Here) view book

YARG

I enjoyed this book and how the characters are coming together. I do have to nitpik about one thing- SENTANCE needs to be SENTENCE. view book

I think Chapter Two looks great for the most part. Some sentences might need fixing, but I am not really sure. Maybe elaborate on her being quiet more? I like Nate adn how protective he is of his sister. You go boy! Like a BOSS! view book

YARG

I really like how protective Nate is of Maxine. I thought in your first chapter, instead of saying she had wispy, long hair just describe her with a long ponytail that had wisps coming out of it. Drew seems nice, but I wonder if something is up. You mentioned their dad and that jerk who lived with them for a while. I did not like the cursing but good story otherwise. view book

IYARG: find this book very interesting. I hope to keep reading. Having a scy-fy approach makes it interesting. I thought for a while the igrl in teh mag was a sex slave, though and not another one fo them. view book

YARG
This looks very interesting and I look forward to what happens next. However, I am having a bit of trouble recognizing who is speaking in the dialogue. Other than that, good work so far. view book

I have to ask how come your character's friend 's name is Ruth? It sounds like an old lady's name. view book

YOu're also the one who had a girl meet BOY AT CAMP WHO KINDA HAD A THING GOING BUT NOT REALLY . Sorry about caps stupid caps lock view book

I actually suggested something would happen to someone based on the first chapter of your book once. So funny! Okay, not really but yeah. LOL view book

So, you're the one who had the girl hide in the bathroom and call her mom cause kids made fun of her in your book! It was inspiring kinda :/ I'm weird. view book