Very powerful storyline here; being kidnapped and raped at twelve...good job of telling it. It definitely draws the reader in and makes him want to read on. Good suspense... Many stars...Wlisted for more reading later view book

Violet, Your story is a rough one and you do a good job of telling it. Did notice some missing commas here and there, and even a few that didn't need to be there. Minor editing nits... Being a Christian, I have a hard time reading your story. I automatically want to console you; tell you that G... view book

Great first chapter; you really bring the reader into the scene with your main character. Good mystery buildup with the note also. Overall, your writing is strong and this novel should go far on this site. many stars... view book

Interesting first chapter here, Don. I must admit that the whole homosexual undertones had me taken aback initially, but you're probably right on about the type of peope Beelzebub would want in his army. Good descriptions and good start to your novel...many stars. view book

You do a great job of describing your MC here. Your writing is strong and your story flows well. Interested in seeing what good ole Max gets himself into. many stars view book