Hi Henry! There's a lot to recommend your book, elements that if worked on can be made into a very good story. They're all there. The problem I found is the pacing. Your first chapter, for example, covers so many things, all interesting, and as a reader I'd like to know more about them. But it seems... view book

Hi Ian! I like the whole devil-dogs episode at the beginning. Suitably intriguing, mysterious, and scary. It sets the tone off nicely for the story. Well done! The thing I found a bit jarring was the very first few lines. How could Dylan know what was being said if he, as he admits, didn't hear and ... view book

Hi Dave! What I like about your book is your ability to make your characters come alive and seem real, whether they're Colin or a hologram. Well done! There's a lot of humour in the telling, here, so that kept my interest, even though SciFi doesn't normally do anything for me. That's the great thing... view book

Hi B! I found your story to be rich and intriguing. There's so much here that makes this an interesting and worthwhile read. All the elements are there for a great book. My only concern is the unorthodox way in which you render dialogue. The dialogue, itself, is good, but in the theatrical style you... view book

Hi Todd! The best part of your book is how you make your character think, experience, and ask what every one of us would in the same situation. Everyday man goes to Hell. Well done! I especially like the humour which was there right from the start. Lines like, "I realized I couldn't do this for eter... view book