1366 days ago
I deeply appreciate everyone's involvement with my reaching the Editor's Desk, including commenting and taking time to read my work. I thank Harper Collins for providing a critique of Spirit Prisoners.My revised according to your suggestions and my complete manuscript is 69,000 words. Best regards and stay in touch! Janet Marie
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Outstanding tale of a broken heart and a passonate protagonist. Thoroughly researched and masterfully crafted. Flawless prose and eloquent style.
On my shelf, no doubt!
Best wishes, Janet Marie
Fresh voice. It is authentic and doesn't leave gabs for the reader to assume as you skip ahead to tell your story. I would dlete teh last sentence in chapter one. It seems to slide out of POV and it doesn't add to the last line of dialogue. Your protagonist is likeable and easy to id...
Excellent pitch. Great writing all around. Love your clean, tight style. Fantastic physical movement supporting the dialogue. Perfectly played emotions and state of mind with movements in plot. Well done.
Good luck, Janet Marie
Interesting setting which adds mood to story. Excellent descriptive narration and you have thought out every nuance of the surroundings. The voices are natural and move the story forward. I agree with trimming the prologue and would consider trimming unnecessary information. Fantast...
Very interesting hologram that is able to act independently despite relying on a computer to exist. Nice presentation of Erica and you place Ben at great risk by giving them a violent past. Smoldering tension from the manner in which you present Grace, leading reader to expect her to ca...