Hi, Mallie. My first impression as I read, Can I Buy You Dinner, was. This is very entertaining writing. I like your style of writing, and I love your mixture of witty drollness and satirist sense of humour. You conjure up the scenes that would normally be classed as mundane, or accused of not advancing the story, and therefore, unnecessary; how often have I heard that! However, by making them interesting and entertaining, they enriched the story and blended with your embellishing and over exaggerating style. I’m waiting with curious anticipation to find out what a professional reviewer will make of your writing style when your story reaches the desk; and of that I am sure it will do. Mallie I thank you for reading my story. It is always encouraging to have a good writer show an interest in ones work, especially when it is a first attempt. I wish you all the best, and I will keep an eye on your progress. Yours truly Kylla. view book

Hello Catherine, I have read the first chapter of your book and found it very easy to read; you have a very relaxed style of writing. I haven’t got time to read more of this intriguing story at the moment, but I enjoyed it enough to put it on my shelf, to get back to it later. All the best and love from Kylla. view book

Hi E.M, I have read all of, Sex Laughs and Coffee. I am attempting to write an exotic story that is different from the usual. That’s why I was drawn to yours, because you have written something plain and simple. You have said it how it is in real life; the dialogue is natural; you have opened up the thoughts and feelings of your characters so that they are laid bare for the reader to empathise with. It is well-written and easy to read, that is its appeal. I know how difficult it is to get people to read and comment on this type of genres here on authonomy. People don’t read passed the first two chapter at best. Exotic books are just skip-read and only the sex is commented on, the story never gets reviewed on it merit. I wish you the best of luck with this unusual story. Well done E.M, love Kylla. view book

Hi Dwain, I am sorry to have to say that I didn’t enjoy your very stiff style of writing. You are telling the story to us the reader, instead of letting us live it. There was also a huge amount of mundane information that didn’t advance the story.
Alexandria’s walk to Professor Von Lennon’s office is an example. You wrote ( she walks ) at least a dozen times. Here are some examples.
She walk out of the door.
She reaches the foot of the stairs.
She walks quickly along the sidewalk.
As she continues her walk.
Alexandria walks west along the college main street.
She comes to the end of the street.
She stands on the curb the lights turn green and she leisurely walks across the street.
She walks while thinking to herself.
Alexandria thinks to herself as she walks.
She walks in through the large oak doors.
She walks down the corridor.
She walks about forty feet down the hallway.
She finally got to the Professor’s office with nothing to advance the story from the time she started the walk. It was mostly mundane, and unnecessary.
I am sorry if I have been what I see as truthful. I don’t wish to be hurtful. Like most of us here your work needs a lot of editing. However, you have got a good imagination and if you love writing you will sort it out in the end. I too am constantly editing and re-writing, so I sympathise with the enormity of the task. I wish that I hadn’t started the bloody story. All the best love, Kylla.
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Hi Nicole, I read your synopsis and could see the potential there for a good story. However the first chapter had a few holes in the reality of events taking place.
The first thing that didn’t make sense was the way that Natalie worked out the distance of 20 miles.
It was at least 20 miles or more, and that was by car going at least 40 miles per hour.
You would need to know the time the journey took with the car doing 40 miles an hour. ie 30 minutes at 40 mph the car would have travelled approximately 20 miles.
She couldn’t even fathom how far it would take her to walk it.
She couldn’t fathom how long it would take her to walk it. I do country walks, and I set out to do about 20 miles in a day. Believe me that is a long way.
The next thing that didn’t ring true was that she didn’t hear a diesel pull up right behind her car. A diesel is very noisy. It would make sense if she had music on the radio, and she was singing with her daughter trying to comfort her. Then the sudden appearance of Jack would have startled her and accounted for her hostility.
Then this reluctance to accept his help? I mean she is in the middle of nowhere for God sake. She might have been cautious, but he is all that is available, and if he drove off she would have nothing. That situation needs changing somehow so that the reader feels her fear but know that she has to Realistically not insult him by saying that she does not need his help. I will read more and get back as soon as possible. I like the way the story is heading. My kind regards. Kylla.
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Hi Leesha, You said on your profile that you want to write books that are down to earth, relating to a lot of us without fuss of over complicated words. Stories that anyone can pick up an enjoy and get utterly lost in. Leesa you have accomplished all of that with. Becoming Aware. I have been reading it over the last four days, in-between trying to get on with my story; editing never ends does it? I haven’t bothered with typo’s or punctuations, they can be sorted later. In fact, I was enjoying the read so much that I didn’t look for any.
Right from Abriya and Clarence’s first meeting it is captivating. The sexual tension, and Abriya’s wanting, longing for sex. Phew frustrating. It took me back to when I had a boyfriend who was big. I had all of those thoughts and feelings. Nevertheless, my partner now is very small, strange don’t you think? Anyway, I digress, but that’s the influence of your writing. The dialogue was great, very realistic. Their explicit almost getting down to it, it was really well written. You got right inside the characters hearts and heads. Then in chapter ten, when Abriya changed it was tremendous, it was written so vividly that I read it twice. Leesha you can really write, I am jealous, LOL. I have stared you top marks, and I will put you on my shelf as soon as possible. Well done, lots of love. Kylla.
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I must admit that there are so many vampire stories on here that I had made up my mind not to read any of them. However, I am glad that I did because it is not the usual vampire that can only come out at night. It is an original slant on an old theme, and I liked the concept. I am not keen on stories written in the first person, and I was thrown a curve ball when I started to read the second chapter with Mr. Breckt now talking in the first person. I had gotten used to the story being told through the eyes and thoughts of Mia, she, being the main character. I think that Mr. Breckt would have been a more sinister vampire being written about in the third person. I would have preferred the story teller's point of view to describe anything and anyone when ever Mia was not involved. That is only my preference of cause. Because Mai talked to herself and even argued with herself. It wasn’t always clear if she was saying it, thinking it, or feeling it. It sometimes meant stopping to read it again. The sexual attraction between the characters is amazing. The triangle is a brilliant relationship with many ways to pursue it. It is loaded with self-doubt coming between Mai, and poor Oliver, you have to feel for the poor guy he is between a rock and a hard place. I have enjoyed what I have read so far even if it is a vampire story. I think it is the best book on here, and I can’t wait to see what a professional Harper Collins review will have to say about it. Love from, Kylla. view book

Hi Emma thank you for your encouragement and helpful advice. As I promised a few days ago I will now support your book all the way to the top. Lots of luck, Kylla. view book

Hi Emma thank you for your encouraging review and for your advice. I have edited the first chapter on your recommendation, and it is very much better. I am still trying to complete the story, and then I will do some serious editing and polishing. It never ends does it? Because this type of genre is not many people's choice of reading it is very difficult for me to get honest opinions and advice. So you can imagine how delighted I was that a good writer such as you spent time to read my work. I have never attempted to write anything before. I have read some of your book, Sally of Spring Row, and I have stared it high. I will back it when I have a space on my shelf. I will definitely help you to get on to the editor's desk when you are in the last ten positions. Many thanks and my best wishes, Kylla. view book

Hi Emma with your book on 102 book shelves and 356 comments, there is nothing that I can say. I have read the first two chapters, and I can see why your book has done so well it is a very professional, well written, and probably a good story. However, it is too dark and kitchen sink for my taste. The only way I can help you is to give it high stars, and I have done that. I will keep an eye on you and when you do need that final push to the editor's desk then I will find a place on my shelf. You don’t need any more reviews it has all been said. kind regards Kylla. view book

Hi Emma with your book on 102 book shelves and 356 comments, there is nothing that I can say. I have read the first two chapters, and I can see why your book has done so well it is a very professional, well written, and probably a good story. However, it is too dark and kitchen sink for my taste. The only way I can help you is to give it high stars, and I have done that. I will keep an eye on you and when you do need that final push to the editor's desk then I will find a place on my shelf. You don’t need any more reviews it has all been said. kind regards Kylla. view book

Hi, Geoff, welcome to authonomy. I am looking for authors to swap read, and give me some reaction to my story. Here is a snippet.
“I have a vanity case with all the essential.” Michelle smiled as she reached for a bottle of brandy, and she held it under her chin, and giggled. “I smell like a wet dog, so I might as well be a Saint Bernard.”
Holding a bottle in one hand and trying to keep a blanket around her with the other hand proved to be impossible, and she lost her grip on it. It slipped off her shoulders and fell around her feet. She stood naked holding onto the bottle, looking calmly at Andrew, who taken by surprise just stood and stared.
“Oops! That could have been a disaster ... I could have dropped the brandy.”

I will read yours in return. Kind regards, Kylla.
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Hi Neville, I do struggle to read a lot of the books on here, but your story, One Off Sir, I read the whole eight chapters non-stop. It was that good. I will go as far to say it is the best story I have come across in the two years that I have been on authonomy. I was so captivated by the story that I didn’t make any notes. I can’t remember thinking that I would change anything. The characters and their conversations were realistic. It flowed nicely, with a good pace, keeping my interest, a real page turner. It was so well written; I could smell the slop-out in the mornings. I think this will do well, and I will support it as soon as I get a vacant space on my shelf. High stars, well done Neville. All the best, Kylla

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Hello Lynn, welcome to authonomy. I have read a lot of Mills and Boon romance books, and your writing is up there with the best of their authors. You get inside the characters and display their thought and emotions. The dialogue is brilliant too, not so flowery as a mills and Boon, and it is all the more realistic for that. You have a wonderful natural talent for the descriptive scenes and for building up the sexual tension between your characters. Chapter eight is very erotic and extremely well written. I know this book will do well, and I have backed it and stared it with pleasure. All the best Lynn. Regards Kylla. view book

Hello Brian, Because of your profile I don’t think that you should consider reading my story. It is very explicit right from the start, and that gives the wrong impression and prevents people seeing the true relationship develop between two totally different people. It has a story and a message, so it is not gratuitous sex. However, it is a sexually motivated story. I will help to promote your book, and I don’t expect you to back mine. Sincerely, Kylla. view book

Hello Lucette, I will gladly support your book until the end of the month. It would be a shame to get so close and then fail. Good luck Kylla.

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Catherine. Why is it when us girls sleep around we are slappers? When guys sleep around they a just being a bit of a lad? Kylla si Vengo. view book

Hi Catherine, after reading five chapters of your book I can only repeat what you said to me. Men and their willys!! You have had plenty of experiences , probably big ones, small ones, and disgusting smelly ones, yuck! What we have to put up with, is it worth it? Yes! Yes! Yes! LOL. Very well written story Catherine, I will be back for more. see-ya. Kylla si Vengo. view book

A very unusual story, you obviously are a medium yourself. I know nothing about spiritualism but I found it easy to understand because you didn't get to technical and I found the subject very intriguing. I have actually started to read, Voices in the Dark by Leslie Flint a medium that you mentioned in your book. I like romance stories usually, so the close family in your story gave me the same sort of warmth in their relationship. All the characters came alive to me even though you didn't go into a lot of descriptive details.Emily their three year old daughter is a little darling and Steve...Well he is a bit of a nut case in a loving sort of way. I couldn't stop laughing at his attempts to explain things to the doctor and then again to the police. His spirit father Jim was just as zany pretending to stumble around in the dark with an open cut thoat razor at a seance. You claim you are not a writer, more of a story teller. I won't challenge that but it good enough and it was easy to read, humorous, sad, entertaining and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I liked the first version of the ending, although the secondversion would certainly be so dramatic that it would haunt the reader longer. good read I recommend it. view book