Brilliant stuff. Did you re-write some of this? If not, it reads much better the second time around, lol. I read (or re-read) from chapter 6 onwards – everything seems tighter and more relevant although I was reading slower too, which might have helped! The overall story seems clearer, but not at th... view book

Sorry about the delay in commenting on your latest chapters – crazy busy at the moment and not much chance to read properly. In brief - I am enjoying it still, I particularly like the language and voice you use, but I’m not sure what the significance of some of some of the plot is, ie things happen... view book

I liked chapter 5! Especially the threat to break him (good hook), and the fact that I don't actually know where this is going. Please write quicker ;) view book

Ok, I ‘ve read this on two sites now, lol. And like it a lot on both of them. For AFF - In some ways AFF is more serious than here. There is no game there, you can’t buy reads or ratings, no one has a vested interest in being kind to you. If the short pitch isn’t interesting, they wont click. If... view book

Amusing, and a lot of fun. Definitely a clever idea. I liked the short, self contained chapters/scenes, I thought that worked very well and made it very easy to read. It was very visual – For most of it I felt like I was watching the book rather than reading it, and the contrast between that and ... view book