You might be on to something there, re/lucifer :) He is one of my fave characters to write about. Excellent perspective, I think. Thank you so much for taking the time to read ! Annastacia view book

[QUOTE] Well, as so often happens, I’m the contrary view. Here’s the problem, as I see it: It’s mostly told as a synopsis. You spend the first 938 words personally talking to the audience, giving them background. '' This being my first draft, I expect I will need to tighten here and there - in... view book

I've just read the snippet you kindly sent to me, and even though romance really isnt my sort of thing normally - I have to say that what little you sent me was enough to make me smile. You are a gifted lady, and I think I might actually take a crack at reading this :) Thanks for sending! Anna ... view book

Your musings are helpful! Yes, Cate seems to be a missing person at this point, I think because this is all before she comes unto the scene, this is more an introduction - and yes, Im well aware that maybe I need to bring her in a bit sooner, or else I need to rewrite my synopsis - my brain is c... view book

...I'd normally 4read a Chapter, type comments and then move onto the next chapter, but fr me this was a moment for first impressions. I like the impact your trying to make but would go biblical on this - god looked down on his creation and he was not happy..... then perhaps break this down to.. a... view book