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written 220 days ago
cherry

Four corners book one The rock star.

I'm pleased to see your book again and was surprised when you took it off authonomy especially when you were so near the desk. Its an exciting story and I hope it does well this time now that its so well edited. Once again you have my backing all the way.
Ruby Middleton
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written 564 days ago
cherry

Hi Junetee,
I love the new font. Its just as pretty as the last one you used but easier to read.
I noticed you have re-arranged your chapters and added the odd new poem here and there.
This is an excellent collection of poetry and I'd like to put 'Pillars of sand' back on my bookshelf again.
high stars.
Ruby Middleton
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written 660 days ago
cherry

A great pitch and prologue.
A very moving story, written extremely well, almost like poetry.
To write things as if you were seeing them as a child cant have been an easy thing to do. You have done it remarkably well.
This is a great book and one I am pleased I found. I rate it highly and back it.
Ruby Middleton
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written 660 days ago
cherry

Exxcellent stylem wonderfully written! I was laughing all the way through.
Great fun. Highly starred and backed.
Ruby Middleton.
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written 678 days ago
cherry

Mute.

I'm so impressed with your book Brian, I cannot fault it, not that I would want to.
The pitch is intriguing .
Your writing is superb, your style is the best I've seen yet. Sometimes when people are good writers they can become boring and lose a little bit of theirself. I think 'souless' might be the word I'm looking for.
You describe everthing beautifully, without overdoing it. And I can picture all the fine detail in my mind, which is wonderful, ie;' 'she tugged at her hair band and made sure one of her thin braids hadn't slipped out.' Its a simple description but it paints a detailed picture in your mind.
I have to say also, excellent dialogue and narrative.
Moni is a very complex character with issues of her own. You show this with her actions and her words when she is with the girl.
I felt a pang of emotion when I read the last sentance of chapter two (chapter one), and at once the book won my affection.
'I promise that I won't let nobody hurt you, ever. I promise, baby.'
This is a sentence worth using at the back of your book when publishing, it shows the deep relationship beginning between them
It was the 'baby' that did it. But it is the words I've used many times when speaking to my own children.
Well I think youve won me over with this book, and I've only read two chapters. I know there's much more in the story thats related to the beheadings (which I haven't mentioned) and what the girl has seen - and if she has anything to do with them. Its definitely worth putting on my watchlist for future reading, and for a time on my bookshelf when I have a space available.
If you haven't got this book published then get it done on create space. Dont bother with publishers, nobody does anymore. Its perfect.
Ruby Middleton
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written 686 days ago
cherry

Honeysuckle Jones.

I liked the pitch, it intrigued me. I'm a middle child, a middle sister and a middle friend. I felt like the book was about me.
I also liked the beginning, it was so casual, and thats so important in a book.
You write well and your words flow wonderfully making this a very comfortable read.
Your characters seem very real, you have presented them well, and I found no flaws.
I found it very amusing when they were purchasing the vibrator in the sex shop, and the dialogue was great.
The story reminds me a little of an old film in which Doris Day played an interior decorator, and she shared a phone line with a male neighbor who she hadn't seen. He was a bit of a rogue with the ladies(Rock Hudson - who was gay!). They ended up together after a lot of arguements on the phone and a few dates, with him using a different name. It was a great film!
I hope this book continues to be just as interesting and as humorous. I look forward to reading more in the future.
Ruby Middleton (From the chick-lit thread)
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written 686 days ago
cherry

The Awakening;Dawn of Destruction

This is an excellent fantasy book written in a unique style.
It has a great name, a good pitch and an interesting prologue.
The writing flows well, its comfortable to read and has no sudden clumsy words.
Both the story and the characters are interesting.
The length of the chapters are good and they finish with a good hook.
Its richly described in a poetic way, creating vivid images.
I particarly love the way it begins with the beautiful view, then changes to danger and then to black. Lots of colour visuals.
Its been polished well and is ready for a publisher, and I'm sure it will do well.
Great work Cara!
Ruby Middleton
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written 686 days ago
cherry

Walking on Eggshells.

This is an amazing story, set in the times I've often thought of writing about. My mother often talks about her past and I have so many of her memories in my head, of her childhood in the war, and her adult life in the late fifties. In England it was so different to how it is today.
This book brings the past alive again. Leslie's life is so 'real' it feels almost as though she's telling us her story.
I have read two chapters but will definitely be coming back for more. I enjoyed the comfortable style of the writing. It flows beautifully and the dialogue works so well.
I think Jo is a great character. He cracked me up with his witty remarks - particularly the piece about the dogs;
'Jo winked and popped a polo mint in his mouth.
''Not to worry Nanny Mr. L has always wanted a fur rug, let the babies shed all they want, and then we should have enough for that.''
I also think Jo's character represents the selfish man of his time. My father was one of many. It was only later in life when he realised just how selfish he was.
Chap 2; Because of the war Irene's childhood was in secure. She was like a lot of children at this time,whether they were away from their families or not. And it left me thinking , very deeply, how lucky we are today. Well written.
I liked the character Mr Reeves. He was a great addition to the story and showed how people trusted their neighbours in the past, allowing children to wander. Its a pity it can't be like that today, its like we've lost something in our lives. And to think, the person the children should be kept away is actually their aunt who theyre living with. You have done a wonderful job portraying these kind of things.
As far as problems with the book there weren't any.
I was a bit curious about the Mickey mouse gas masks though?
And there are quite a few edits - most of them have already been pointed out. But they are minor and we all have them.
This is a brilliant story and should do very well.
6 stars - youre backed!

Ruby Middleton
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written 688 days ago
cherry

CHARISMA
I absolutely love the pitch, especialy - 'But is he the real deal, or just a great pretender?
You have a great idea for a book here, its a brilliant storyline.
I have read three chapters and really enjoyed your relaxed style of writing and love where this story is going.
And I found it so charismatic!
The story is funny, its quirky, and it verges on conspiracy theories. But thank God, it's not as serious as that, and instead its a light hearted story about Elvis possibly being alive and well, and living in Worcester, England.
It certainly sparks the imagination.
Its very creative, well written, and imaginative. And I rate it highly.
Ruby Middleton
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written 688 days ago
cherry

You have such a talent for writing poetry. Theyre so beautifully written. I particularly like the poem called 'Daisy'. Its written with a lot of emotion.
You have also presented them beautifully, I love the font you have used. Excellent. 6 stars from me, and youre backed.
I'm pleased to see you have re-gained your ranking.
Ruby Middleton
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written 689 days ago
cherry

Great style of writing. Great storyline.
Lexi's Place is an easy-going read; a nice bit of escapism and would make a great book to take on holiday.
The story's great, the characters are strong, the dialogue is good, but one thing seems a little odd and that is Lexi's reaction to her husband leaving her - there seems to be lack of emotion.
But I love the idea that she starts a new life for herself and builds a new business up from the ground with the support from her friends. I back the book highly. Its well written and its got great promise.
Ruby Middleton
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written 693 days ago
cherry

Feathers.

I really enjoyed this. I dont know why but I always prefare this genre written in the first person, and you have created a great character to pull it off.
Amber is part of the popular 'thirty somethings' and there are a lot of women out there who are able to relate to her. She gains our sympathy through losing her mother young, from cancer, and her father who is absent from her life, and feels she'll be alone when she finally gets married and has her first child.
The dialogue and descriptions are amazing, you bring the characters and the scenes alive.
My favourite part was when Megan was flirting and her friends were watching her, I thought it was hilarious! Oh and the wind situation, that was funny!
As far as edits go, you have a few commas missing throughout the first chapter, which is minor and can easily be remedied as can the few other things I have listed below;
Stella is a typical lady what lunches - 'what' should be 'who.'
She's a bit of (a) romantic.
'the build up of tonight has been foreplay enough' After this part I was a little confused to what had happened between them (sex?). And so I had to read it again to make sure I hadn't missed something. Maybe if you added ellipses at the end it might help? I'm not always a fan of them but I thought it might break the time up.
Overall this is a great book and I can't wait to continue reading it. I'll put it on my watchlist and back it as soon as I have space.
Ruby Middleton
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written 696 days ago
cherry

No Risk, No Reward.

Great pitch.
I find the plot is full of exciting possibilities. We have a strong male character who we dont know the truth about. All we know for sure is his good looks and muscle toned body. Ellie thinks he's hiding out - but is he? She's instantly attracted to him and allows him to stay against her own judgement. This story certainly has plenty of mystery and it makes you want to read more.
It is written well with a nice pace and a good voice. An enjoyable read.
Highly starred
Ruby Middleton
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written 696 days ago
cherry

The North Korean
You have a great start and an amazing opening to your book. There is plenty of action taking place, and alongside lots of depth too.
I like the combination and I like detail of history. You have used a lot of knowledge and skill to put the story together, to make it believable.
Its well written and you have polished it up to the high standard it is now.
Highly starred
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written 696 days ago
cherry

The Notorious Expat Wives

Great start to a great story. Hope this one does as well as your last! Reading between the lines I think it will.
Written brilliantly, couldn't see any edits, not that I was particularly looking, I was caught up in the story.
Highly starred! Youre on my watchlist for my next bookshelf turnaround.
Ruby Middleton
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written 696 days ago
cherry

DEGREE OF EXPOSURE

I love the sense of humour!
I loved the beginning, it created a great picture in my mind, and I couldn't wait to find out what was going to happen next in the second chapter, it was so funny.
This is a great page-turner, its well written and extremely funny.
Highly starred!
Ruby Middleton
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written 696 days ago
cherry

Catacombs

Thankyou for this entertaining read. Its unusual and entertaining. I enjoy a book that is a little different and takes me into a world I am not accustomed to.
You have a unique voice and you write very well. I enjoyed the chapters I read, they were interesting and detailed. You have created a great character with Madhu.
Highly starred.
Ruby Middleton
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written 700 days ago
cherry

Fascinating story which I've already backed.
Its well written and the dreams are so well described. What an amazing imagination you must have!
Ruby Middleton
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written 702 days ago
cherry

First, I was interested in the chapters. I knew I wouldn't have time to read most of them but I just wondered what they were about. Most of them were about the history of women in the church and I think one was something about what was to come. One chapter stood out - about who invented the bikini etc. This seemed a bit odd to the rest .
Also at the beginning of chapter one, the word 'awesome' was quite a strange and modern word to be using and to be opening the book with, and didn't quite fit in with the way you were writing the rest of the chapter. I feel it pulled the rest down - but that is just my own opinion of course. Otherwise your writing is good and very seriously written. I am very interested in Christianity - in fact other religious teachings too, and have studied them a lot myself. Your book took my interest straight away and I really enjoyed what I read except for these things I have pointed out to you. I have only read a couple of chapters but with a few changes here and there I think your book is unusual and extremely interesting and should do well.
Ruby Middleton
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written 706 days ago
cherry

Slow Poison

This is really gritty and nasty stuff and I like it. It makes me squirm.
I think youve really done a great job of building up the tension to create the amazing scene.
Your writing is very descriptive and with it you have created a very vivid piece of work.
Great stuff. High stars.
Ruby Middleton (Will Ryan)
one typo -'He relieved himself when the hormones kicked ...etc. This is written twice.
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