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written 1356 days ago
cherry

I like it when a writer gets straight to the point. The writing is perfect for the genre and for audiences both young and old. The sentences are short, which leads to an abrupt, uneasy feeling that is well suited to the theme of your story. Backed with well wishes

Laurelle
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written 1370 days ago
cherry

You've had an interesting history of working in public service : ) If you can make it in Hackney, you can make it anywhere. I like the expression 'Muscular Christianity' and also the sentiment expressed about the Krays. There's a mixture of sweet nostalia with a feeling that there's something dark looming in the undercurrent of your writing. Very interesting. Backed with pleasure : )

Laurelle
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written 1373 days ago
cherry

There are some stories which I read in the hope to get hooked some way through, and there are some which catch you from the start. The pitch raised my eyebrows, and so did the opening. This is both shocking and funny. A great combination. Backed with well wishes.

Laurelle
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written 1377 days ago
cherry

I found the best part of your writing to be your fluid narrative. Your have uniquely demonstrated your character's propensity to be conflicted in her views, and this is executed in a humourous and innocent way. Backed.

Laurelle
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written 1390 days ago
cherry

The title and pitch is very catchy, as is the story. The introduction of your hero's mother is great. I didn't immediately get a strong idea of the ex from his intro but i'm sure you have your reasons for this. Backed with well wishes.
Laurelle
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written 1393 days ago
cherry

This is a very intriguing story, Alisa : )

The novel started for me at chapter two (I'm a skip the potatoes and get to the meat kind of person) and I read up to chapter sIX. I loved your descriptions of London from a multi-cultural point of view, and Hamdi seems to be the most interesting character for me.

I picked up a couple of typos in chapter 5 but all in all it's an adventourous story that I would like to read more of. Backed with well wishes.

Laurelle
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written 1401 days ago
cherry

Okay, so now I know why you're number one! You totally deserve it. The pitch is intriguing and the story is gripping, intense, but candidly told and this finely balances the pace. Jake is an immediately likeable character, and it's great that you've sprinkled a bit of sarcy humour in there considering his dire predicament. I wish you luck that you will not need : ) Backed.

Laurelle
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written 1402 days ago
cherry

Hi Katherine

I was taken in by your title and cover, then I read your pitch and thought, hmmm, a story about swans, not really a Friday night reading choice for a simpleton like me. But I was pleasantly surprised. Your narrative voice is so strong, and your simple yet vivid descriptions flung me into the period. This is clearly a lovingly crafted story. Backed with well wishes.

Laurelle
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written 1402 days ago
cherry

Your first opening paragraphs are absolutely gorgeous. I could almost hear a voiceover from some famous actor as I read it. Excellent. Backed. view book

written 1403 days ago
cherry

I liked the fact that you open the book with your hero in the midst of a threat, anticipating how he might escape. It makes me want to find out what happened to him before - I would expect many more twists and turns from reading your story because you have already thrown me, the reader smack bang in a middle of a life or death dilemma. The narrative flows well - forgive my ignorance but it was the word continence that threw me a bit. Otherwise the pitch is excellent and sparked my interest. Backed with well wishes.

Laurelle
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written 1404 days ago
cherry

Your prose is beautiful and I felt like I was transported into the story by your vivid descriptions. Backed.

Laurelle
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written 1405 days ago
cherry

I love Tony's droll and quirky sense of humour. Some of the humour came out of left field which amused me all the more. Happily backing you.

Laurelle
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written 1409 days ago
cherry

Hi Mel,

This is my kind of book - simply put, yet highly intense. Backed.

Laurelle
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written 1410 days ago
cherry

Hey Barry,

The first few sentences made me laugh out loud. It's one of the best openings I've ever read. The next part made me feel sick. Reading this took me through a range of emotions and you are so going to get published if there is any justice in the world.

The slang/language made me feel like I could hear Krisna's voice in my head and he spoke to me effortlessly without the need to fraff about with too much detail. There were some points where I couldn't fully understand the lingo, but when the dialogue kicked in, the story opened up even more for me. Very well done : )

Laurelle
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written 1410 days ago
cherry

Hi Denise,

Although it's in England, I've worked in criminal justice before and felt the reality of your heroine (your situation)and her surroundings from the very beginning as she rushed nervously to court. Not only did I imagine the scenes, I felt like I was in your character's shoes. I wish you all the best with you writing. Backed.

Laurelle Austin
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written 1411 days ago
cherry

Hi David,

I was so impressed by your vivid and unique narrative, you most have a gift for writing and you have mastered your subject. I would wish you luck but my guess is you won't be needing it!

All the best
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written 1412 days ago
cherry

Hi Simon

You sure do know how to grab a reader's attention - from the very first sentence I was intrigued. You threw me into the plot straight away with your punchy narrative, and the second scene immediately ignited my imagination. Good luck .

Laurelle
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