Gosh, that is rather good. The writing is solid and you excel at the characterisation in the stories. One thing I would say, though, is that in Injustice, the Bob section - both the flashback/reminiscence and present day scenes in the cell detract from the larger story as the reader gets hooked on... view book

In general: You do an excellent job with scene setting and world building. The camaraderie between Behren and the other students is good although Caillen has a couple of off notes here and there where she descends a little too much into nagging girlfriend mode. You're doing great withbuilding up... view book

Great setting - a little bit steampunky and a refreshing change from standard fantasy fare. Your writing is solid and the story is excellent. Post more chapters please, I need to see where it's going! :-) Only nitpicks (apart from minor typos) I can find are in Chapter two where, 1) using tragic... view book

Crikey. Talk about kicked right in! This is brilliant. Well told and moves along at an excellent pace. You get an instant sense of the world and the characters are fully rounded. And no nitpicks that I can find. :-) Fab story. Needs to be published. :-) view book

Love this. Fastpaced and generally exciting. Backed! view book