Backed with pleasure. In spite of a few minor errors, you have a good story. It's far more bitter than Kerouac's On the Road or Steinbeck's Travels With Charley, but 2001 and 2005 were not happy years. Sadly, Americans have too quickly forgotten the madness of the George W. Bush years and have bl... view book

Ch, 14: There were other buildings spared in the Great Chicago Fire, including Old St. Patrick's Church, just a few blocks from the O'Leary barn. The land on which the Great White City stood is hardly defunct--the Museum of Science and Industry is one of the original White City buildings (though it... view book

Working through the story and ran into "picked up a few loose rusted railroad ties." (Ch. 6) I think you mean "spikes." The ties are the long wooden planks or concrete beams that keep the tracks together. They don't rust and even the wooden ones are way too heavy to pick up. Steve Wylder See... view book

A really gripping story, well paced, and hard to "put down." You've obviously done a lot of research, as others have noticed. Jason, with his Thomas Friedman-like dropping of brand names and his casual approach to killing comes off as a pompous ass of the nouveau riche with delusions of godhood. ... view book

This is a promising book based on the eight chapters I've read. You may need to make a few adjustments to make sure editors don't see it as a Harry Potter derivative. I'd drop Serena's gills and just give ther the ability to breathe underwater, without a lot of explanation. I'm curious why she sa... view book