Hi Dianna, Just to say congrats on finishing No.1! It’s a bit late in the day for comments but I read through your first four sections and I was really impressed with the quality of the writing. The variation in tone and voice to suit each scene, or particular character, was very deftly handled. Yo... view book

Hi Frederic, I’ve read up to the end of the Coliseum scene, thought I’d leave a comment for now. Overall the writing is excellent and it’s a great idea for a book. It’s a wonderfully vivid description of sunrise at the beginning. Icy bottom of the sea didn’t seem quite right, I don’t think the... view book

Hi Dan, I read the first chapter. It’s a very good idea for a book and I like the glimpse I’ve seen of the world you’ve created. A few things I noticed as I read: ‘gravel-like ground’ is a bit awkward, why not just ‘gravel’, or ‘scree’? Describing the deadly point of a horn that isn’t there p... view book

Hi Sarah, Just had time to read the start of your book, but I’ll leave a comment for now. Your pitches are quite intriguing, though I thought the first line of the second paragraph of the long pitch doesn’t work that well. Also there’s a typo – should be ‘losing’. I like the start in the ho... view book

Hi Sandra, I’ve read the first four chapters, thought I’d leave a comment for now. You’ve a lovely writing style that captures a child’s impressions of a summerhouse very well. The cottage and lake at Port Elgin are rendered with excellent details. Phrases like, ‘picture frames of the car widows’... view book