Wow, by having James negotiate his way through a marriage proposal, we really get a feel for him don't we? Brilliant. Some very good lines that have other writers thinking, "I wish I'd written that". I love this first chapter. Stopped on it because of the title (keep it). Opened it because of t... view book

"Two of the Eskimos had to drag her off like some kind of road kill". LMAO. This is a short intro chapter, but hilarious and promising. You had the accent down as well. I would end with "I got fined the equivalent of six dollars and settled for a stale baguette for dinner". It would be stronger... view book

First, excellent choice for title. Second, your synopsis begs a read and the premise, although done before, always makes for a great story. The dialogue was realistic and your writing flowed easily from prose to dialogue to prose. Not an easy feat. But easy for me to shelve and back. Best of lu... view book

What a great set up and introduction. We are immediately drawn into a mystery and given a bit of background in one short chapter. I am already siding with the boy-man and my curiousity is piqued to know about these giants(?) and how they have changed this young man's life and why. Just a few typ... view book

Hey Daniel, I dove right in because the premise and pitch was sooo good! The first chapter got a bit tedious for me with all the information and backtracking, but i liked the beginning rhythm and positively loved the opening quotes. Very fitting. I think it needs a bit of slicing and dicing to p... view book