A right, rollocking read that reminded me of the books of Georgette Heyer and other writers from the romantic end of the historical novel section. I did wonder whether the punctuation was a little spartan in the opening paragraphs, but it didn't distract from this alluring tale of romance and mel... view book

I’m not a regular reader of YA (I’m far too old) but this seems well pitched for the age group and reflects what I’m told are their interests. Two possible negatives that I’d pick up on: 1. Your long pitch is more of a plot summary than a pitch. You might want to consider re-writing it as if ... view book

Interesting read. I wondered if the prologue could be shortened and tightened up a little and likewise the first chapter. I think there is potential for gripping the reader harder and faster than at present, should you want to do so. J.S.Watts Witchlight view book

An interesting premise. Had you thought of beginning Chapter one at the fifth paragraph, it might make for a good opening? I think this would make a good book for young teens, but you might like to think about ensuring the story progresses through action and dialogue. We need to see the girls... view book

An interesting subject and what I’ve read rings true to the theme. Scenes feel authentic. It is perhaps, though, not the most riveting of opening chapters. The writing feels a little distant, as if it is still trying to decide whether it wants to be factual reporting or a fictional story. If you wan... view book