Randomly picked chapter 8 which started adequately but you really took charge with the "Cobwebs of sleep" line which was a brilliant turn of phrase iv not heard before and showed me I was dealing with someone with skill, or at least a few tricks up their sleeves! :-) I know I jumped right in so can'... view book

I didn't actually spot any typos in the introduction. I thought your style was neat and your main character easily relatable. I'm not sure about the Clueless line tho coz will younger readers remember that? Would Barbie be better? Not my department so that's the best I can do lol. Ah spotted a typo... view book

YARG - Ok when I read the title I was expecting something aimed at younger kids and I actually don't think it fits the high standard of what I read, focusing on chapter 12. The descriptions were very vivid and despite the place not seeming magical to the protagonist I in fact felt a sincerely magica... view book

It's clear why this book is so high in the rankings. It has a great premise and is the first book on here I'd describe as moreish, like Pringles! I focused on chapter 15. Very few negative comments but I when you said head shaped a certain way I would have liked to know WHICH way! It feels well rese... view book

Chapter 36 sort things out comma is wrong side of speech marks. Actually this occurs throughout unless it was intentional? Having jumped in here I didn't really follow what was going on which is probably fair enough! So I went back to chapter 1. The only other thing to note was that you named chapte... view book